Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given charts shows the proportion of a French adults whose parents spoke French regional language when they were in their childhood.

However the other chart shows the number who speak a French regional language to their own child.

The number of adults who speaks habitually in Alsatian language was only 600 . However the number of adults who speaks occasionally Alsatian language was only 300 as half of the number of adults who speak habitually. But the Occitan language was spoken very low in habitually speaking as compared to the spoken occasionally . It was as same as Alsatian language only 600 in habitually speaking and was more than 1m in occasionally speaking.

However , The number of other languages is very low as compared to the Alsatian and Occitan language in both parts. In Habitually speaking the numbers of language called Breton were very low as compared to Occitan and Alsatian language and it follows the same trend in spoken occasionally .In habitually speaking the number of Breton was 300 only and was 100 in Creole language and it was much lower in Corsican language which was only 95.

But on the other hand The number of Adults who speaks occasionally in Breton Language was more than the persons who speaks habitually . It was 400 in occasionally speaking . And it was 150 in Creole language and was 100 in Corsican language.

Moreover , the number of adults who speaks their regional language with their own children has been increased with different languages . The Alsatian language remains on top of the list which was 400k . And the numbers are plummeted in other different languages . In Occitan Language the number was 250k . On the other hand it was lower than 100k which makes only 98k in Breton Language and 95k in Creole Language and number was very low in Corsican language as compared to other languages which was only 90K.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify both charts and include several relevant comparisons, such as Occitan being much higher in occasional than habitual speech and Alsatian leading the figures for speaking to children. However, the report does not give a clear, accurate overview of the main patterns, and several figures are misreported: Alsatian occasional speech is about 240, not 300; Breton habitual speech is about 260, not 300; and the figures for speaking to children are about 90 for Breton, 80 for Creole and 60 for Corsican, rather than 98, 95 and 90. The opening also calls the figures proportions, although they show numbers. Select the key contrasts and report them accurately to make the response more complete and reliable.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has some paragraphing and attempts to guide the reader with phrases such as “However,” “But on the other hand” and “Moreover.” It also moves from the childhood figures to the figures for adults speaking to their children. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the first two charts’ data are discussed in a long, repetitive sequence, and the final chart is introduced only near the end. Several transitions are used mechanically or do not show a clear contrast, while repeated references to “the number of adults” make links between points less clear. Organise the report into a concise overview followed by grouped comparisons, and use linking expressions only when they accurately describe the relationship between the data.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “habitually,” “occasionally,” “remains on top of the list” and “plummeted,” showing an attempt to describe frequency and ranking. However, the range is uneven, with repeated wording such as “the number of adults” and “language,” and some choices are inaccurate or unnatural. “Proportion” does not fit data presented as numbers, and “plummeted” suggests a change over time, which the chart does not show. Phrases such as “spoken very low in habitually speaking” also make comparisons awkward. Aim for precise chart language such as “figure,” “total,” “higher than” and “declined across the categories” only where a genuine sequence is being described.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, using contrast clauses and comparisons, so there is some variety in structure. However, errors in agreement, articles and sentence construction occur frequently enough to make parts of the report awkward. For example, “The given charts shows” should be “The given charts show,” and “adults who speaks” should be “adults who speak.” Article use is also problematic in “a French adults,” while several sentences run together or use punctuation inconsistently, as in “In habitually speaking the number of Breton was 300 only and it was 100 in Creole language.” Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and build shorter, clearly punctuated comparisons before adding more complex clauses.

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