Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar charts illustrate the proportion of French adults whose parents spoke French regional languages in five categories when they were children, by contrast the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Overall , adults whose parents spoke occitan ocassionally has the largest numbers , whereas, equally less people were interested to speak in creole and corsican language. Furthermore, parents who spoke habitually in alsatian language has moderate proportion but who spoke to their own children highly rise than other languages.

In the combined column chart, alsatian and occitan language were spoken habitually and styed same in number. By contrast, occitan and breton languages were spoken 1.1m and 400 thousand, respectively.

However, there is not change in creole and corsican both has lowest rank in habitually and occasionally.

In the third bar chart it depicts those who speak regional languages to there children , alsatian climed at 400 thousand with the higest citizens, while occitan user stayed in 250 thousand.In addition,breton ,creole and corsican languages stayed below 100 thousand.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main contrast between the childhood figures and the smaller numbers speaking these languages to their own children, and you include several relevant values, such as Occitan at about 1.1 million occasionally and Alsatian at 400,000 for the next generation. However, the overview is partly unclear and contains inaccurate comparisons: Alsatian and Occitan were not “same in number” when spoken habitually (about 600,000 and 620,000), and Creole and Corsican were not the lowest in both childhood categories, since Breton was also below them in the habitual series. The claim that Alsatian parents speaking habitually had a moderate proportion is not a clear summary of the chart. To strengthen the report, give a precise overview of the largest and smallest figures and compare the two childhood series accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an overview followed by paragraphs about the childhood figures and the languages spoken to children. This helps the reader identify the broad stages of the report. However, progression within the paragraphs is uneven: the second paragraph moves between languages without a clear comparison, and “In the combined column chart” does not clearly explain which series is being discussed. Linking phrases such as “By contrast” and “Furthermore” are used, but some do not express the relationship accurately, while “However” introduces no clear contrast. Improve cohesion by grouping the two childhood series together, then comparing them with the figures for the next generation, using explicit references to each series.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “habitually,” “occasionally,” “largest numbers,” and “below 100 thousand,” so the reader can generally understand the topic and comparisons. There are also attempts at more formal reporting language, such as “illustrate” and “depicts.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, including “proportion” for counts, “interested to speak,” and “highly rise.” Spelling errors such as “ocassionally,” “styed,” “climed,” and “higest” are noticeable and reduce precision. Aim for accurate chart-reporting expressions such as “the number of adults,” “spoke the language,” and “rose to,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast clause beginning “whereas” and a sentence using “while.” Nevertheless, errors are frequent, and some sentences are difficult to follow. For example, “adults whose parents spoke occitan ocassionally has” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “parents who spoke habitually … has moderate proportion” also has faulty agreement and sentence construction. The sentence “there is not change in creole and corsican both has lowest rank” combines clauses without a clear grammatical structure. Work on matching verbs to plural subjects, forming complete comparisons, and using punctuation to separate ideas. More reliable sentence patterns will make your data easier to understand.

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