Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The charts show the number of french adults whose parents spoke french regional language from their childhood.in first part of the chart the Occitan are high in ranking in spoken habitualy like 600 thousand poeple and occasionally 1.1m people.

And Corsican and Creole are less in ranking of habitually and occasionally. Like 1500 thousand of people habitually and 200 thousand of people occasionally But the no. of people of Alsatian spoken more habitually than occasionally.And the people of Breton the ratio of occasionally spoken more as compare habitually.

The second part of the chart represnt the only whoes of adult people whoes spesk regional language to their own children. like

Alsatian 400 thousand

Occitan 270thousand

Breton 98 thousand

Creole 80 thousand

Corsican 66-65 thousand

It is a general report of number of adult who spoke a regional language to their own children.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify both charts and include several figures from the second chart, such as 400,000 for Alsatian and 80,000 for Creole. However, the report addresses the task only minimally: it gives little clear overview and does not systematically compare the two charts. Some key data are inaccurate or confusing. For example, the figures for Corsican and Creole are described as “1500 thousand” and “200 thousand” habitually/occasionally, whereas the chart shows much smaller values; the highest occasional figure is Occitan at about 1.065 million. The response also contains only 133 words, below the required 150, so the description is underdeveloped. Add a clear overview and accurate comparisons of the main patterns.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to move from the first chart to the second, signalled by “in first part of the chart” and “The second part of the chart.” This gives the response some overall organisation. However, ideas within the first section are difficult to follow, and the comparisons are not presented in a consistent order. The sentence beginning “And Corsican and Creole” is followed by figures that are unclear, while the Alsatian and Breton comparisons are added without a clear progression. The second chart is presented as a list rather than integrated into a report. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and the two charts, and connect comparisons with clear, accurate linking phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “habitually,” “occasionally,” “ranking,” and “ratio,” and the language names help identify the categories. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the data difficult to understand. For example, “high in ranking” and “less in ranking” are not natural ways to compare quantities; “higher figures” and “lower figures” would be clearer. “The ratio of occasionally spoken” is also an unsuitable phrase for describing the chart. Spelling errors such as “french,” “poeple,” and “represnt” further weaken control. Aim for precise chart vocabulary and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response communicates some basic information through simple clauses, but grammatical control is inconsistent and the range of sentence structures is limited. Errors in sentence formation and agreement appear in phrases such as “the Occitan are high in ranking” and “the people of Breton the ratio,” where the relationships between ideas are unclear. The opening also joins sentences incorrectly in “from their childhood.in first part,” and several fragments, including the list of figures for the second chart, are not formed as complete report sentences. These problems can make the meaning difficult to follow. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use accurate articles, plurals, and punctuation when comparing categories.

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