Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The bar chart clearly illustrates the of french adults whose parent spoke french language to them and at the time when they where children and the number who speak regional language to their children .
overall the huge number of people spoken occasionaly regional language to their children
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 3.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0
The response makes a minimal attempt to introduce the charts, but it does not describe the main data or compare the two measures. The statement that there was a “huge number” who spoke a language “occasionaly” is unclear and inaccurate: the chart shows parents speaking languages to adults in childhood, not adults speaking occasionally to their own children. It also omits the key contrast that Occitan was the most common language spoken occasionally in childhood, while Alsatian was most common among adults speaking to their own children. The report is substantially below the required 150 words, leaving the task largely unaddressed. To improve, include a clear overview and select several accurate comparisons with figures.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5
There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by a sentence beginning “overall,” which signals an overview. However, the ideas do not develop into a report, and the relationship between the two charts is not clearly explained. The opening sentence is difficult to follow, while the overview does not identify a precise trend or comparison. There are no supporting details or paragraph development to guide the reader through the information. Use a short introduction, a distinct overview, and one or two body paragraphs grouped by chart or by the most important comparisons. Linking phrases such as “By contrast” and “In comparison” would help make those relationships clear.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The response uses a small amount of task-related vocabulary, including “bar chart,” “adults,” “regional language,” and “overall,” so the topic is recognisable. However, the range is very limited, and some choices are inaccurate or imprecise: “huge number” is vague for describing chart data, and “spoken occasionaly regional language to their children” confuses the chart’s categories and measures. Spelling errors such as “french,” “where,” and “occasionaly” also reduce accuracy. Build a bank of precise reporting expressions, such as “the figure for,” “spoke the language occasionally,” and “passed the language on to their children,” and use the chart’s labels consistently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response attempts two sentences, including an overview introduced by “overall,” but the grammatical range is narrow and control is inconsistent. In the opening, “illustrates the of french adults” is incomplete because the noun phrase is missing its main information, and “the number who speak” is not clearly connected to the rest of the sentence. The phrase “people spoken occasionaly” also lacks a suitable verb construction; for example, write “people whose parents spoke the language occasionally.” Capitalisation and punctuation need attention, including the start of the second sentence and the missing full stop at the end. Practise complete subject–verb structures and check each sentence for a clear main clause.
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