Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The charts illustrate the number of French adults who had experience of speaking French regional language in their childhood and the number of those who speak French regional language to their own children.
Looking at the number of adults whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood; in habit of speaking regional language Alsatian and Occitan accounted for same numbers around 600 thousands. while, Breton recorded under 400 thousands. Creole and Corsican had the lowest numbers among all regional language under 200 thousands. If we talk about occasionally speaking; Occitan had the highest number among all langauge constitute over 1 million. However, Breton had the secound highest figures 400 thousands and Alastian were at third position represented over 300 thousands. Meanwhile, Creole and Corsican recorded the same number as they recorded in habitually speaking section.
The numbers of adults who speak a regional langauge to their own children; Alsatian has the highest figures around 400 thousands and Occitan is record under 300 thousands numbers of adults. while Breton, Creole and Corsican are accounted under 200 thousands.
Overall, spoken habitually, Alsatian and Occitan had the high number of adults whose parents spoke a regional language. In contrast, spoken occasionally, Occitan had the highest numbers among all, followed by Breton and the Alsatian. while creole and corsican had the lowest figures in both habitually and occasionally. The number of adult who speak regioanl to their own children; Alsatian has the highest number and Occitan is at seocnd position, Corsican has the least numbers adults.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5
You cover both charts and identify several important comparisons, including Occitan as the clear leader for occasional childhood exposure and Alsatian as the most commonly passed on to children. Most figures are broadly consistent with the chart, and you distinguish habitual from occasional speech. However, some details are inaccurate or too vague: Alsatian and Occitan are not equal for habitual exposure (about 600,000 and 620,000), and Creole and Corsican are not the same in the occasional category (about 120,000 and 105,000). The overview also says Alsatian and Occitan had the highest habitual figures without clearly noting that Occitan was slightly higher. Your coverage is relevant, but more precise comparisons and a clearer overview would strengthen it.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5
The report has a recognisable structure: an introduction, discussion of the childhood figures, a paragraph on speaking to children, and an overall summary. This gives the reader a coherent route through both charts. You also use signposting such as “However,” “Meanwhile,” and “Overall.” At times, though, the organisation feels repetitive because the final overview repeats several points already made, and transitions within paragraphs are not always smooth. The semicolon after “childhood” leads into an awkward sentence fragment, while “while” begins a new sentence without appropriate capitalisation. Grouping the key comparisons more tightly and reserving the final paragraph for a concise overview would make progression clearer and cohesion less mechanical.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “accounted for,” “highest,” “lowest,” and “figures,” and you attempt to distinguish “habitually” from “occasionally.” This is enough to communicate the main comparisons, but the range and control are uneven. Several phrases are unnatural or imprecise, such as “in habit of speaking regional language,” “had the highest figures,” and “are accounted under 200 thousands.” Repetition of “number” and “figures” also limits flexibility. There are noticeable spelling errors, including “langauge,” “secound,” “Alastian,” and “regioanl,” which detract from accuracy. Use standard collocations for describing data and check spelling carefully to make the report more precise and fluent.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with contrast, for example, “However, Breton had the secound highest figures…” This shows some variety, but control is inconsistent, and several sentence patterns are faulty. Examples include “Alsatian and Occitan accounted for same numbers,” which needs an article and a more accurate comparison, and “Occitan is record under 300 thousands numbers of adults,” where the verb form and sentence structure are unclear. There are also problems with agreement and tense, such as shifting between past descriptions (“had”) and present forms (“has” and “is”). Punctuation creates fragments, particularly after the semicolon in the second paragraph. Aim for complete, clearly punctuated sentences and consistent past-tense reporting.
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