Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar graph illustrate the number of adults who's parents speak to them habitually, ocatianally and regional language to there own children.In the graph they do five language's comparison with each other's (in thousands). Overall, Alsatian and ocitan language have the same number of 600 in habitually spoken while in occasionally speaking ocitan have the highest ratio of speaking more than 1m and regional language have the the highest ratio of Alastian, Whereas, Corsican have the lowest in both sides.

In additional, in all these three grapghs

Corsican have the lowest number from all sides.Alastan have 600 in habitually speaking 200 in occasionally and 400 in regional speaking while the ocitan have tge higher in ocatianall of 1m.Futhermore, bretan have quite number in all three Creole have 100 from all three sides.

overall alatian and ocitan have higher numbers in all three graphs.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s general subject and note some valid features, including Occitan’s high occasional figure and Corsican’s low figures. However, the report only partially covers the data: it does not clearly distinguish the two childhood-speaking categories from the figures for adults speaking to their own children, and several comparisons are inaccurate or unclear. For example, Alsatian and Occitan are not both exactly 600 for habitual speech (about 600 and 620), and Creole does not have “100 from all three sides.” The final claim that Alsatian and Occitan have the highest numbers “in all three graphs” is too broad, since Occitan leads occasional speech while Alsatian leads transmission to children. The response is also 7 words below the required minimum. Include a clear overview and accurate comparisons across all three series.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the report, with an opening, an overview beginning “Overall,” and a later paragraph of details. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the categories are not consistently named and ideas are repeated: Corsican being lowest is stated twice, and the conclusion repeats that Alsatian and Occitan have higher numbers. Linking phrases such as “In additional” and “Furthermore” do not make the relationships between points clear, while the unfinished phrase “In additional, in all these three grapghs” interrupts the flow. Group the information by chart series, use clear comparisons, and avoid repeating the same overview point. More accurate references to which figures belong to each series would also help readers follow the report.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “habitually,” “occasionally,” “comparison,” and “ratio,” so the basic topic is recognisable. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or awkward, such as “ratio of speaking,” “in all three sides,” and “quite number.” Repeated use of “higher” and “number” also makes comparisons imprecise. Spelling errors—including “ocatianally,” “Alastian,” and “bretan”—further reduce clarity and control. Aim for standard chart language such as “figure,” “proportion,” “category,” “approximately,” and “compared with,” and check the spelling of language names. These changes would make the descriptions more precise without requiring unnecessarily complex vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, but grammatical control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make the intended comparisons hard to interpret. For example, “The bar graph illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, while “who's parents speak” uses the wrong form of the relative construction. The sentence beginning “Overall, Alsatian and ocitan language have…” combines several ideas without clear sentence boundaries, and “Corsican have the lowest” again has agreement problems. Articles, plurals, and punctuation are also unreliable, as in “five language's comparison.” Practise building accurate short comparison sentences first, then combine them with clauses using “while” or “whereas.” Check agreement, possessives, and full stops before submitting.

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