Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar graphs compares numbers of French adults whose parents speaks French occasionally or habitually when they were child . The other bar graph illustrates the same number of adults speaks regional langugae with their own children. Regional language includes Alsatian, Occitan, Breton, Creole and Corsican

Majority adults speaks Alsatina and Occitan habitually in their childood and Occitan is the least language spoke by adults in their childhood . Alsatian and Occitan shares the same number of count which is 800

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the two charts and names the five languages, but it reports very little of the information shown and does not provide a clear, accurate overview. The claim that Occitan is “the least language” spoken in childhood is incorrect: it has the highest occasional figure, at about 1,065 thousand, while Corsican is lowest in both childhood categories. The statement that Alsatian and Occitan have the same total of 800 is also misleading; their combined figures are about 840 and 1,685 thousand respectively. The response omits the figures for adults speaking languages to their own children and the key contrast between generations. It is also 81 words, below the required 150. To improve, summarise the main patterns and support them with accurate comparisons from both charts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the report: the opening introduces the charts, followed by a paragraph describing some findings. This gives the reader a starting point, and the list of languages helps establish the subject. However, the response is too brief to develop a clear progression through the data, and the second paragraph combines several claims without explaining how they relate. The transition from the childhood figures to the chart about speaking to children is not developed, and there is no concluding overview. Use separate paragraphs for an introduction, a summary of the main trends, and selected comparisons. Linking phrases such as “by contrast” or “whereas” would help connect accurate comparisons rather than leaving the ideas as isolated statements.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant task vocabulary, including “bar graphs,” “habitually,” “occasionally,” and “regional language,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited, and several word choices or forms reduce clarity: “same number of count” is unnatural, while “least language spoke” does not express the intended comparison clearly. There are also spelling errors in “langugae,” “Alsatina,” and “childood.” Aim for precise chart-reporting expressions such as “the figure for,” “the highest number,” and “speak a language to their children.” Check spelling carefully and avoid repeating “number” when a more exact term such as “total” or “figure” is available.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts simple statements and a longer sentence, but grammatical control is inconsistent. For example, “The bar graphs compares” has a subject–verb agreement error, and “whose parents speaks” should use a plural verb. The phrase “when they were child” also needs a plural noun and a more complete grammatical construction. In “the same number of adults speaks,” the verb again does not agree with the subject, and the sentence structure makes the intended meaning difficult to follow. Full stops and spacing are also inconsistent. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine comparisons using clauses such as “while” and “whereas.” This will add variety while helping you control agreement, articles, and plural forms.

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