Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The chart illustrates the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and there are different regional languages including alsatian, occitan, breton, creole and corsican. All there languags are spoken by French people according to their specific region and culture; i.e; habitually and occasionally, but alsatian and occitan carry more speakers, upto 600K, than remaining languages. While in the other chart there are numer of adults who speak a regional language to their own children and there's a major rise in the alsatian language ehich shows more people speak alsatian language in their region. Then there are speakers of occitan language ranging upto 250K of population. Remaining language speakers range from 80K to 100K respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the two charts and name the five languages, and you make a relevant comparison by noting that Alsatian and Occitan are prominent. However, the report addresses the data only minimally: it gives few accurate comparisons and does not provide a clear overview of the main patterns. In particular, the first chart distinguishes habitual from occasional speech, but your description does not explain that Occitan is especially high for occasional use (about 1,065,000), while Alsatian is about 600,000 habitual and 240,000 occasional. You also describe a “major rise” in Alsatian without clarifying that the second chart is a separate measure of adults speaking to their children. The response is 105 words, below the required 150, which limits coverage. Include a concise overview and several precise comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows the order of the two charts, and words such as “While” and “Then” signal some movement between points. However, it is presented as one paragraph, with no clear separation between an introduction, an overview and supporting details. The progression is difficult to follow because several ideas are joined into long sentences, and the relationship between the childhood figures and the figures for speaking to children is not made explicit. Phrases such as “All there languags” and “Remaining language speakers” also leave the reader unsure which data are being summarised. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and key comparisons, and organise each chart’s figures systematically. Clearer referencing and fewer loosely connected clauses would make the report easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary, including “habitually,” “occasionally,” “regional languages,” and “population,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several expressions are imprecise or repetitive, such as “speakers of occitan language” and “more people speak alsatian language in their region.” Spelling errors, including “languags,” “ehich,” and “numer,” are noticeable, while “carry more speakers” is an unnatural collocation. The phrase “upto 600K” is also informal and does not clearly describe the chart values. Aim for accurate data-reporting language such as “the figure for,” “approximately,” and “compared with,” and check spelling and collocations carefully. This would make your descriptions more precise and appropriate for an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine ideas using clauses introduced by “While” and “and,” and the reader can understand the general topic. However, the sentence structures are limited and several long sentences are not controlled well. For example, “The chart illustrates … and there are different regional languages” joins an introduction to an awkward second clause, while “While in the other chart there are numer of adults…” is an incomplete or poorly formed opening. There are also errors in agreement and sentence construction, as in “All there languags are spoken,” and punctuation is inconsistent, particularly around “i.e;”. Use shorter, complete sentences and practise accurate comparative structures, such as “Occitan had the highest figure for occasional use, whereas…” This will improve clarity and control.

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