Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The number of french adult whoes parent spoke a regional language to them . They were children and the number who speak a french reginol language to their own children .

According to the chart First , The number of adults in thousand whoes parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood. The spoken habitually language Alsatian 600 and occtian 600 and breton 250 and creole 100 and coursian 80 . And the opposite side , The spoken occasionally language Alsatian 250 and occtian 1m and breton 400 and creole 100and coursain 100 .

According to the second chart , The number of adult in thousands who speak a regional language to their own children . The language of Alsatian 400 and the language of occitan 250 . And the language of breton 100 . And the language of creole 80 . And the language of corsican 50 .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies both charts and reports several relevant figures, including the high occasional figure for Occitan and the comparatively large number speaking Alsatian to their children. However, it does not provide a clear overview of the main patterns, and some figures are inaccurate: occasional Occitan is about 1,065 thousand, not 1 million, while Alsatian is about 240 thousand, not 250 thousand; the figures for speaking Corsican to children are about 60 thousand, not 50 thousand. The report is also below the required 150 words, with 131 words counted; 19 words copied from the prompt were excluded. Add an overview and select the most important comparisons, checking figures against the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence: it introduces the subject, describes the first chart, then moves to the second. Phrases such as “According to the chart First” and “According to the second chart” help signal this order. However, the information is presented largely as a list, with repeated sentence openings and little comparison between categories or charts. The opening is also a fragment rather than a complete introduction, and “And the opposite side” does not clearly explain the relationship between the two series. Use separate, purposeful paragraphs for the overview and key details, and connect figures through comparisons rather than repeating the same reporting frame.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses relevant chart vocabulary, including “spoken habitually,” “spoken occasionally,” “in thousands,” and “regional language,” so the reader can generally identify the categories being described. However, the range is narrow and repetitive, especially in phrases such as “the language of Alsatian” and repeated use of “the number of adults.” Several spellings are inaccurate, including “french,” “reginol,” “occtian,” “coursian,” and “coursain”; these make the report look less controlled and can obscure language names. Aim for accurate spelling and more natural reporting expressions, such as “the figure for” or “spoke the language to their children,” while avoiding unnecessary repetition.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response communicates the broad subject and uses some simple sentence patterns, but grammatical control is inconsistent. The opening, “The number of french adult whoes parent spoke…,” is not a complete sentence, and the next sentence also lacks a clear grammatical structure. There are recurring problems with articles, plurals, and agreement, as in “The number of adult in thousands” and “Alsatian 600 and occtian 600.” Capitalisation and punctuation are also uneven, with unnecessary capitals after commas and sentence fragments joined by full stops. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, for example, “The chart shows that 600,000 adults spoke Alsatian habitually as children.”

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