Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a French regional language to their own children.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

Number of adults (in thousands) whose parents spoke a regional language to them in childhood

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The charts illustrates the number of French adults whose parents spoke a French regional language to them when they were children and the number who speak a rench regional language to their own children now.

In the chart one,They shows two types of people who spoke habitually and who did it occasionaly. Alsatian is the most used language for habitually and Most of the people spoke Occitan in occasionally shows chart 1 which is more than 1M . Further more, corsican was most less used language for both cases.

In the chart two, It shows the number of adults who speak a regional language to their children. Again, Corsican is the less used language. Most of the frence adults communicate with their children in Alsatian according to the chart and It is almost 400 thousands people.

There are mostly 5 language in both charts.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the two charts and report some relevant comparisons: Occitan is highest for occasional childhood use, while Corsican is among the lowest, and Alsatian leads in speaking to children. However, the first chart is misreported when you say Alsatian is the most used habitually; Occitan is slightly higher. The overview is also incomplete: it does not compare the overall scale of childhood exposure with use by the next generation or summarise the main pattern across languages. The final statement that there are five languages adds little. The response is 120 words, below the required 150, so several key comparisons and figures are left undeveloped.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic order, moving from the first chart to the second, and phrases such as “In the chart two” help signal the shift. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, the ideas within each section are brief and not developed into a clear overview followed by supporting details. Linking expressions such as “Further more” and “Again” are used mechanically, and the final sentence about there being five languages does not provide a meaningful conclusion. Some references are unclear, for example “They shows” and “both cases.” Use separate, purposeful paragraphs and connect comparisons directly—for instance, contrast childhood figures with the smaller numbers speaking each language to children.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a small set of relevant terms, including “habitually,” “occasionally,” “language,” and “communicate,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, vocabulary is repetitive and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “most less used,” “most used language,” and “people spoke Occitan in occasionally.” There are also spelling errors, including “rench,” “occasionaly,” and “frence,” which reduce precision. Aim to use standard chart-reporting language and accurate collocations: describe figures as “the highest” or “the lowest,” and say a language was “spoken occasionally.” Vary “shows” with verbs such as “records” or “indicates,” while ensuring each choice fits the data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences are simple, and the response attempts a few longer structures, such as “Most of the people spoke Occitan in occasionally shows chart 1 which is more than 1M.” These attempts are difficult to follow because clauses are joined without a clear grammatical structure. Agreement and sentence formation are also inconsistent: “The charts illustrates” should be “The charts illustrate,” and “They shows” should be “It shows” or “The chart shows.” Capitalisation and punctuation are unreliable, as in “In the chart one,They” and “Most” mid-sentence. Use controlled simple sentences first, then add comparisons with accurate clauses—for example, “Occitan had the highest figure for occasional use, at just over one million.”

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