Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, stress is now regarded as a major problem, and it is thought that people suffer from more stress than they did in the past. However, others feel that the amount of stress people have today is exaggerated. They say that previous generations were under more pressure, but the idea of suffering from stress did not exist.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

For people’s lives few things are more crucial than science. In many developed and developing countries, a substantial amount of money is allocated to science as it often necessitates the use of various resources, such as microscopes, computers, software, and so on. Nowadays, many would agree that contemporary society has transcended its tradition boundaries and will soon become boundless in its pursuit of science for the benefits of people’s lives. Nevertheless, I firmly believe that people’s lives should be improved through science.

Naturally, science in the form of development is considered more essential for people’s lives, creating inexhaustible facilities for living standards that are not available from other sources. Moreover, it demonstrates unparalleled benefits for people’s lives, permeating and enhancing every conceivable sector of society. Since people seek development and fulfillment through science, ample in science is imperative to elevate model living standards. If this is adopted by government and individuals alike, many stand to benefit significantly. Science in nations such as China and Japan for instance emerged as pivotal model for development, delivering enhanced services for their people. Under certain circumstances, people may shy away from science due to a range of challenges, such as mental and physical health crises, financial constraints adverse environmental conditions, technological barriers, resource limitations, fear of failure, and lack of support. While science is widely embraced in many major cities worldwide, people in impoverished and developing nations frequently with profound financial limitations and deteriorating conditions striving to implement this approach. Therefore, the notion of science is not always appealing. From an economic, social, and national perspective, if the goals of people dictate that science is not merely an option but an imperative, they may choose to embrace it.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response fails to address the prompt entirely. The task asks for a discussion on the topic of 'stress' in modern society versus the past. However, your essay focuses exclusively on the role of 'science' in society. Because you have not addressed the specific topic of the prompt, the response is considered off-topic. In an IELTS examination, this results in a very low score for Task Achievement, as the content does not relate to the question asked. To improve, you must carefully read the prompt and ensure your arguments directly address the specific subject matter provided.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

While the essay is structured into paragraphs, the internal logic is difficult to follow because the content is irrelevant to the prompt. There is an attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Nevertheless', and 'Therefore', but these are used to connect ideas that do not form a coherent argument regarding the topic of stress. The progression of ideas is disjointed, and the lack of relevance to the task makes the overall flow confusing for the reader. Focus on ensuring that each paragraph directly supports a central thesis that answers the specific question posed.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a reasonable range of vocabulary, using words like 'necessitates', 'unparalleled', 'permeating', and 'imperative'. However, the word choice is often forced or used in contexts that do not make sense, such as 'ample in science is imperative'. While you have a sufficient range to express complex ideas, the lack of relevance to the topic means the vocabulary is not being used effectively to communicate the required information. To improve, focus on using vocabulary that is natural and appropriate for the specific context of the essay topic.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are some grammatical errors, such as 'people in impoverished and developing nations frequently with profound financial limitations and deteriorating conditions striving to implement this approach', which is a sentence fragment lacking a main verb. While you attempt complex structures, the accuracy is inconsistent. You should focus on ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb and that your complex sentences are punctuated correctly to avoid confusion.

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