Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, stress is now regarded as a major problem, and it is thought that people suffer from more stress than they did in the past. However, others feel that the amount of stress people have today is exaggerated. They say that previous generations were under more pressure, but the idea of suffering from stress did not exist.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Many people believes that stress is major problem new generation have to suffer from it more than people in past. while other believe that old generation had to suffer from more stress even more than current generation but there was no term such as suffering from stress

i partially agree with both view in my opinion the amount of stress i slightly increased for new generation because of new trends and competitive enviornment but it does not means that people in past do not have to deal with stress. they also deal with it but there was no term as suffering from the stress and they had to deal with different kind of stress.

there is no mention of the people suffering from the stress in past generation hence youngsters may think that only they are suffering from stress but the thing is there were no particular term regarding suffering from extreme stress. current generation has to suffer from it because competitive market and current trends creates so much work pressure. they have to tackle these things and it increases the work load which has deadlines and urgency which becomes major factor for stress hence they have to gone through these things. now days people started understanding fragileness of mental health how important it is. so, they started making crucial steps towards it.

in the past people does not understood the importance of the mental health so many people who suffered from it but people do not know about them despite all these factors i believe that stress was existed in old time too but people not took it as this much important factor but after the revolution in the mental health importance it became important hence people believes that they have to suffer more than people in past.

overall i agree with the statement that stress suffering is increased as compared to past but it does not means that people in past does not gone through it they suffered from it too but idea of stress suffering was not existed at that time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat repetitive. While you mention 'competitive markets' and 'work pressure' as reasons for modern stress, these points are not fully explored with specific examples or evidence. The discussion regarding the past is also a bit circular, focusing heavily on the lack of terminology rather than comparing the actual pressures faced by previous generations. To improve, ensure each paragraph introduces a distinct, well-supported point rather than restating the same concept in different ways.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by repetitive phrasing and a lack of varied cohesive devices. You rely heavily on simple transitions like 'hence' and 'so', which makes the progression feel mechanical. Additionally, some sentences are disjointed, such as the transition between the discussion of modern work pressure and the mention of mental health awareness. Using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in contrast') and ensuring that each sentence builds clearly upon the previous one would significantly improve the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band. You frequently repeat words like 'stress', 'suffering', and 'important'. There are also some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'fragileness of mental health' (should be 'fragility') and 'people not took it as this much important factor'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more sophisticated synonyms and collocations, and ensure that your word forms are accurate in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the essay that occasionally impede the flow of reading. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'people believes', 'people does not understood'), tense inconsistencies (e.g., 'stress was existed', 'people not took it'), and missing articles. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often marred by these errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, particularly subject-verb agreement and consistent verb tense usage, before attempting more complex grammatical structures.

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