Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-26
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some societies, stress is now regarded as a major problem, and it is thought that people suffer from more stress than they did in the past. However, others feel that the amount of stress people have today is exaggerated. They say that previous generations were under more pressure, but the idea of suffering from stress did not exist.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Nowadays, people are busy in their lives. As a result, they have A lot of stress, it can be certainly seen that individuals suffer from more anxiety than they had in past. While, others think that the amount of stress masses have in present time is exaggerated, they believe that previous people were under more stress. I will discuss my both views before making final note.
To embark upon, In present era, people have more stress as they have A plenty of work and done their tasks so they have stress about that. Moreover, they have A lot of workload by which they are not able to spend time with their friends, family and relatives. Apart from that, they are busy all the time by which they can not refresh their mind and they face many difficulties due to stress. For example, Teenagers stress related to their career and future goals and adults have related do complete needs of house and family members. Additionally, old people aware about their kid's responsibility.
However, In past, there were no entertainment sources by which they have no source of any entertainment. In spite of this, they have a lot of work at their homes and guests offer visited to each other houses. Thus, they have many works to do and they do not get time to relax to themselves.
To conclude, In modern era, people are busy in their daily tasks. and in past, masses were also busy in doing housechores. thus, the stress is always on the top all of the time. So, this problem can solve with the help of family support and by exploring different places.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, though the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. While you mention that modern people are busy and past generations had household chores, the arguments lack depth and specific evidence. For instance, the claim that 'there were no entertainment sources' in the past is a broad generalization that is not fully supported. To improve, ensure that each paragraph provides a clear, well-reasoned explanation rather than just listing activities. Your position is stated in the introduction, but it could be more clearly integrated into the conclusion to provide a stronger sense of closure.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'To embark upon' are used incorrectly to start the essay, and the transition between ideas is sometimes abrupt. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the use of 'by which' throughout the text, which creates awkward phrasing. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore,' 'consequently,' 'in contrast') and ensure that each sentence flows logically from the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic phrases like 'have a lot of' and 'busy in their lives.' There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'masses have in present time' and 'guests offer visited to each other houses.' To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to the topic of stress and societal change. Avoid repeating the same words in close proximity and focus on using collocations correctly to convey your ideas more naturally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. There are consistent issues with article usage ('a plenty of work', 'a lot of workload'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. Many sentences are simple or contain run-on structures, such as 'As a result, they have A lot of stress, it can be certainly seen...' which should be punctuated as separate sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically the use of articles and correct verb tenses, before attempting more complex structures.
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