Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, stress is now regarded as a major problem, and it is thought that people suffer from more stress than they did in the past. However, others feel that the amount of stress people have today is exaggerated. They say that previous generations were under more pressure, but the idea of suffering from stress did not exist.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

in some population thought is stress major problem and people suffer from more stress than they did in past. And many population thought is more stress to previous generation but the idea of suffering from stress did not exist. But my thought is the more under pressure previous generation.

In some condition not a major problem and stress in past because past time is not a hard working time and competition is so low no more stress in past. past more people work in farming so stress level is low and no requirement of new skill so stress level is low so no more pressure.

In some condition previous generation feel more stress level because today more hard working condition and more competition in today time zone. So Many company ask to improving a more skill in our working areas. Today generation use more smart phone , computer and any other divis so feel more stress in today life. Previous generation is under more pressure because any person is job less so fell more stress in his life any person mind is good bus that is job less so their mind set select wrong way in his life. is some condition fell stress more not work in life. So many student feel more stress so that leva her study and select wrong way so stress is stay in his life so that select a wrong work.

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the essay attempts to address both views, the arguments are underdeveloped and repetitive. The position is unclear, and the lack of sufficient supporting evidence or logical progression makes it difficult to follow the writer's perspective. The conclusion is incomplete, consisting of only one word. To improve, the student must expand on their arguments with specific examples and ensure all parts of the prompt are addressed with sufficient depth.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a clear logical structure. Paragraphing is present but does not effectively group related ideas. There is a severe lack of cohesive devices; sentences are often linked by simple repetition of words like 'stress' or 'past' rather than logical connectors. The progression of ideas is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argument. The conclusion is essentially missing, which further disrupts the coherence of the response. Improving the use of transition signals and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would greatly enhance the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic terms such as 'stress', 'problem', 'past', and 'work', often repeating them multiple times within the same sentence or paragraph. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'today time zone' and 'any other divis' (devices). The range is insufficient to express complex ideas, and the lack of variety makes the writing monotonous. To reach a higher band, the student needs to expand their vocabulary to include more academic and topic-specific terminology.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammar is characterized by frequent, systematic errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with sentence structure, including missing articles, incorrect verb tenses, and fragmented sentences (e.g., 'In some condition not a major problem'). Subject-verb agreement is frequently incorrect, and the use of complex structures is largely absent or attempted unsuccessfully. Punctuation is also inconsistent. The writing relies on simple, often ungrammatical, sentence patterns. A focus on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles is essential for improvement.

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