Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, stress is now regarded as a major problem, and it is thought that people suffer from more stress than they did in the past. However, others feel that the amount of stress people have today is exaggerated. They say that previous generations were under more pressure, but the idea of suffering from stress did not exist.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In recent era, anxiety and stress become crucial issue in few societies because of that numerous individuals are suffer from different pressures while, other believe that it increase recent time compared to past whilst, I believe that each duration has their own problem however in past less technology were available so it create various difficulties in that time.

To begin with, nowadays numerous people are dealing with stress and anxiety due to work pressure and advanced technology which create to many problems in every individual daily life. To explicate it, in modern era young generation are rely on to digital devices such as, children get attached in smartphones and spend too much time instead of playing outdoors games which create stress and their mind could be disturbed and adult deal with work pressure. For example, according to Japan research 80% of children deal with stress and anxiety which affected their study as well. However, in past time this problem more increased compared to present.

On the other hand, in previous decade people have few facilities compare to nowadays and they faced various difficulties to survive their life. To elaborate it, in the past time individuals had fever modern facilities so household work was more physically demanding, they did not have advanced technology to complete their task easily for that they had to spend more time and money which create stress. For intense farmers did all farm work without any machinery and advanced devices which require too much effort and money. Thus, depicts that old generation had fever facilities which create stress and anxiety.

In conclusion, although in modern era people have suffered various type of pressure and stress however, in past old generation suffer stress more than present due to fever facilities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views—that stress is a major modern problem and that previous generations suffered more under pressure without naming it—and provides a clear position in the introduction and conclusion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the discussion on modern technology causing stress among children and adults is supported by a generalized claim about Japan, but lacks deeper extension. Similarly, the argument about past generations facing physical demands without machinery is stated clearly but remains somewhat underdeveloped. The reasoning is occasionally blurred by imprecise phrasing, such as claiming that past generations 'suffer stress more than present due to fever facilities'. While the requirements of the prompt are generally covered, the depth of argumentation aligns best with Band 5.5 to 6.0; therefore, a score of 6.0 is awarded as all parts of the prompt are touched upon with relevant, albeit simplistic, ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with a clear paragraph structure, including an introduction, two body paragraphs representing opposing views, and a conclusion. Transitional markers such as 'To begin with', 'On the other hand', and 'In conclusion' are utilized to guide the reader through the text. However, cohesion at the sentence level is frequently faulty and mechanical. There are issues with referencing and cohesive ties, such as the awkward transition 'because of that numerous individuals are suffer' and repetitive sentence openings. Furthermore, paragraph internal progression is sometimes hindered by run-on sentences and a lack of precise conjunctive links. These weaknesses in cohesive control and referencing place the performance firmly in the Band 5.0 category.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully incorporating topic-related words such as 'anxiety', 'technology', 'generations', and 'farm work'. However, there are frequent errors in word choice, morphology, and collocation that detract from the overall quality. Examples include 'In recent era' instead of 'In recent eras', 'are suffer' instead of 'are suffering', 'fever facilities' instead of 'fewer facilities', and 'For intense' instead of 'For instance'. Less common lexical items are attempted, but they often lack accuracy and natural control. These persistent vocabulary and spelling errors, while not completely impeding communication, cap the lexical score at a Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures. While there are some attempts at complex sentences using subordinating conjunctions like 'although', 'because', and 'while', these structures are frequently faulty and poorly controlled, leading to major structural errors and run-on sentences. For example, the opening sentence is a single, grammatically tangled complex construction containing numerous agreement and tense errors. Simple sentences also contain basic mistakes, such as modal and auxiliary verb misuse ('did not have advanced technology... for that they had to spend'). Punctuation is weak, with comma splices occurring frequently. Due to the high frequency of grammatical errors and the lack of accurate complex structures, the writing falls into the Band 4.5 to 5.0 range, warranting a 5.0.

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