Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, stress is now regarded as a major problem, and it is thought that people suffer from more stress than they did in the past. However, others feel that the amount of stress people have today is exaggerated. They say that previous generations were under more pressure, but the idea of suffering from stress did not exist.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

There are in many colonies of individuals consider stress as a major issue, and argued that people now under more in stress situation than it past, while others think the amount of stress are more in the past but nowdays it is most visible and have specific term of this, which is stress. people are also under the stress in the past, but I believe in this modren era people are much in the stressful situation because of the high inflation, which make the people extremely worry and because of the changing mode towards moderanising things.

There are many people that they are in stress and worry about the numerous things, but which one is more prominent that is inflation. Furthermore, they are suffer from this inflation things because the monthly house expenditure are a lot. In addition, there income are less than requirements. so they are under stress and feel extremely worry about the things, such as about the food expenditure, clothing expenditure, monthly electricity and gas expenditure these things related they feel not will in good moment. For instance, last time Peshawar university phsycology department doing reasearch stress related and they found in the study around 500 hundred thousands people mentioned high inflation is the major reason of the stress.

On the other hand, there are many people they feel extremely in stress, because of the things what modified througout the time period. Such as, the modification in technology, modification in people dressing sense, eating manues, in Addition in the terms of automobile. Subsequently, they want to see yourselves in luxury life, but for luxury living they have no enough money so they feel in stress. Furthermore, in this modren era the competition among the individuals are increased significantly on a daily basis. For example, there are many individuals that they buy mobile phones, automobiles, and luxury watches, but when they see other people in more luxury. So they want further competition with them and want to buy more expensive things than others. So like that they make one another in pressure and stress.

To conclude, in the old times there also stress and pressure among people. However, i think in this modren era people feel in stress signficantly, because of the expensive and great expenditure on monthly requirements and due to competition with one another in terms of luxury and wearing and driving different things.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both parts of the task by discussing the views that stress is a modern problem and that previous generations suffered more under pressure without naming it. You presented a clear personal position in the introduction and conclusion, favoring the view that modern individuals face greater stress due to high inflation and societal modernization. Ideas are extended, such as the discussion on inflation and consumerist competition, and you supported your argument with a university research example. However, some arguments are repetitive and minor parts remain slightly under-developed. Nevertheless, all task requirements are met adequately, aligning with the Band 6 descriptor.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with a clear paragraph structure separating the introduction, two body paragraphs representing different views, and a conclusion. However, cohesion is frequently faulty and mechanical. You rely heavily on basic transition markers such as 'Furthermore', 'In addition', and 'On the other hand', and referencing is sometimes unclear, such as 'these things related they feel not will in good moment'. Paragraphing is used appropriately to segment the essay into clear thematic blocks, but organizational progression is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing you to convey basic ideas about inflation, modernization, and consumerism. You attempt some less common lexical items such as 'consumerist', 'expenditure', and 'modernization', but these are often marred by noticeable errors in word choice and form, such as 'moderanising things', 'eating manues', and 'phsycology department'. Spelling errors occur ('reasearch', 'signficantly'), but vocabulary limitations do not completely impede overall communication, placing your lexical performance solidly at Band 5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but grammatical accuracy is quite low throughout the text. There are frequent errors in verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure, such as 'there income are less than requirements', 'doing reasearch stress related', and 'they want to see yourselves in luxury life'. Punctuation errors also appear frequently. While the general meaning can usually be understood, the high density of structural errors means that simple sentences are often flawed and complex structures are frequently faulty.

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