Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, stress is now regarded as a major problem, and it is thought that people suffer from more stress than they did in the past. However, others feel that the amount of stress people have today is exaggerated. They say that previous generations were under more pressure, but the idea of suffering from stress did not exist.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Nowaday in some societies stress is now regared a major problem and it is thought that citizens suffer from much stress that they did in the past .While the other hand peoples think that the ammount of stress public have today is exaggerated.I think more people suffered from the stress its a mental problem its is not expect like a new and old gernation. In this eassy I will give my opinion and give some resaon .

Firstly , I asume that many people suffer from the stress because they have many problems and there personal issues.In my opinion I think that they face many accidents in their life and they like to live alone mostly they spend time alone no one take to them so they will have stress and mentally disturbence.

At the other hang today internet change the world . They also leave the individuale from the each other human hvae no time for they bit busy in internet and they give not their time to the others. So they suffer frome the stress and many other problems .In my opinion some people suffer frome the stress because they face the all issues alone some time a specil personal no more . So people went to stress and they have no person to share their problems. I think some time residents went to the stress because they have face many problems lonly no one asked him to moved make your life good no one motivate their so they became to worried and stressed . I clearly define that every gernation suffer frome the stress but their issues are not same . In sum up, If citizen give their time to the other world if they understand their problem. So we could be protect them from the stress issue and many other problems .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response addresses the prompt by attempting to discuss both views regarding modern versus past stress and offers a personal opinion, concluding that every generation suffers from stress differently. However, the development of ideas is limited and at times unclear due to confusing phrasing, such as 'I think more people suffered from the stress its a mental problem its is not expect like a new and old gernation.' The ideas presented, such as isolation, loneliness, and the internet causing people to have no time for each other, are relevant to the topic but remain under-developed and repetitive. The writer's position is discernible, but the lack of clear argumentation and limited support pushes the task achievement into the lower band. To improve, the student should ensure each body paragraph contains fully articulated arguments with clear examples, directly contrasting the two perspectives outlined in the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay is divided into paragraphs, which shows an awareness of structural organisation, but the progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by poor sentence construction and a lack of cohesive devices. Transitional phrases are either misused or absent, resulting in a disjointed flow. For instance, 'At the other hang' is a misspelling and misuse of a contrast marker, and cohesive links like 'So' are overused to connect loosely related clauses. Referencing is also problematic, with pronouns such as 'they' and 'them' often lacking clear antecedents, making it difficult for the reader to follow who is being referred to. While paragraphing is attempted, the overall arrangement lacks clear logical progression, leading to a confusing reading experience.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily restricted. The student frequently repeats words like 'stress', 'problems', and 'people' throughout the response. Furthermore, there are numerous spelling errors and incorrect word choices, such as 'Nowaday' instead of nowadays, 'regared' instead of regarded, 'ammount' instead of amount, 'eassy' instead of essay, 'resaon' instead of reason, 'asume' instead of assume, 'disturbence' instead of disturbance, 'individuale' instead of individual, 'hvae' instead of have, 'form' instead of from, 'specil' instead of special, 'lonly' instead of lonely, and 'gernation' instead of generation. These lexical inadequacies and frequent spelling mistakes significantly strain the reader and obscure the intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical structure of the essay is heavily flawed, consisting primarily of simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex structures. There are persistent errors in punctuation, capitalization, verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and word order. Examples of major grammatical errors include run-on sentences and comma splices, such as 'In my opinion I think that they face many accidents in their life and they like to live alone mostly they spend time alone no one take to them so they will have stress and mentally disturbence.' Articles are frequently missing or misused, and prepositions are incorrect in phrases like 'gived their time to the other world.' The high frequency of grammatical errors causes continuous difficulty for the reader.

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