Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, stress is now regarded as a major problem, and it is thought that people suffer from more stress than they did in the past. However, others feel that the amount of stress people have today is exaggerated. They say that previous generations were under more pressure, but the idea of suffering from stress did not exist.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In some societies, stress is now considered a major oroblem, it is believed that people are more stressed than in the past. However, others feel that the level of people experience today is exaggerated. They say that previous generation were more pressure, but the concept of suffering frim stree did not exist. Nowadays people face problems such as Work load and financial pressure which are the main reasons of stress while in the past people were also in stress with poverty and helthcare problems.

To begin with, one of the major reason of stress nowadays is financial pressure. To explain, because they must support their families and pay thier bills, rent, schools feeses people work for long hours. For example, in europe comapnies pay salaries per hour so people work for long hours to get high salary. As a result, people feel stressed and exausted.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You introduce the topic and mention both perspectives: modern pressures such as work and finances, and past difficulties such as poverty and healthcare. You also begin to explain one modern cause, using long working hours and an example. However, the response addresses the task only minimally: the view that stress is exaggerated is not developed, and there is no clear personal opinion or conclusion. The past-generation point is only briefly stated, without supporting explanation or evidence. The response is 137 words, so it is 113 words below the 250-word minimum; the eight words copied from the prompt are excluded. To improve, discuss each view in a separate developed paragraph, state your position clearly, and support your claims with relevant examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening paragraph introduces the issue, and “To begin with” signals the start of a supporting point. The example about hourly pay also follows the idea of financial pressure. However, the response has no clear overall progression because it stops after developing only one reason and does not move on to the opposing view or a conclusion. Connections between ideas are sometimes unclear, particularly in the opening, where several claims are joined in one long sentence. Use distinct paragraphs for the two views and your opinion, and make the relationship between each claim and its example explicit. A wider, more accurate range of linking expressions would also help the reader follow the argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “financial pressure,” “support their families,” “pay their bills,” and “long hours,” which makes the main example understandable. However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling and word-choice errors make reading less smooth, such as “oroblem,” “frim,” “stree,” “helthcare,” and “exhausted” misspelled as “exausted.” Some phrases are also imprecise: “the level of people experience” does not clearly express the amount of stress, and “people were more pressure” is not a natural collocation. Build a broader set of accurate terms for stress and social pressures, and check spelling and collocations carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response includes simple statements and attempts a more complex explanation, for example, “because they must support their families and pay their bills … people work for long hours.” This shows some ability to connect reasons and results. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and errors are frequent enough to cause difficulty. In the opening, two independent clauses are joined with a comma: “stress is now considered a major problem, it is believed…”. There are also agreement and number errors in “previous generation were” and “one of the major reason,” as well as an incomplete construction in “people were also in stress.” Practise accurate clause joining, subject–verb agreement, articles, and plural forms, then vary sentence patterns while keeping them controlled.

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