Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, stress is now regarded as a major problem, and it is thought that people suffer from more stress than they did in the past. However, others feel that the amount of stress people have today is exaggerated. They say that previous generations were under more pressure, but the idea of suffering from stress did not exist.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In my opinion, I think they are asking right that many of people feel strees than they did in past.Yes strees is a major problem not just of some societies but also of nowadays problem. many people feel streesed and sometime they donot know the reason of that stress.

This paragraph tells us that the previous generation was under more pressure. But I donot think the the same because nowadays our childern are under more pressure than the previous generation.Because they have study pressure/

They have ti bear the study pressure and family pressure at same time.This is the era of alot of competion. Everyone wanted to be first in every fieldof life.

Many people have the stress of thier past that what they have done in their past.

I think our generation is suffering more than us.Like it is the era of social media. Everything is exposed on it. No one has his privacy.

I think this generation can share thier propblems to their elder and I hope they will understand them.Still they can not face these problems that this generation is facing.

I think the new generation is under more stress then the previous generation.

I think we should try to understand their views and respect them.

From my experience

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You give a clear view that younger people face greater stress today, mentioning study and family pressures, competition, and social media. These are relevant starting points, but the task asks you to discuss both views. The claim that previous generations were under more pressure is only briefly introduced, and you do not explain why people may now describe that pressure as “stress.” Your own position is repeated rather than developed with specific examples or evidence. The response also ends with the unfinished phrase “From my experience,” which leaves an idea incomplete. The required minimum of 250 words is not met, so there is limited space to develop the discussion. Explain each viewpoint and support your opinion with a concrete example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic progression from your opening opinion to pressures on children and then to social media and a concluding recommendation to respect young people. However, the response is not divided into clear paragraphs for the two views, and several ideas appear as short, loosely connected statements. Repeated openings such as “I think” make the progression feel repetitive, while “This paragraph tells us” does not clearly identify which viewpoint you are discussing. The final fragment, “From my experience,” also interrupts the ending. Organise the response into an introduction, a paragraph for each view, and a conclusion; use clear links to show how each example supports the point being made.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “pressure,” “competition,” “social media,” and “privacy,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, the range is basic and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “stress” and “pressure.” Spelling errors such as “strees,” “childern,” “competion,” and “propblems” are noticeable and sometimes make reading less smooth. Some expressions are also imprecise, for example “the era of alot of competion” and “the stress of thier past.” Build a more accurate range of topic vocabulary and check spelling carefully. More precise phrases would help you explain causes and effects rather than relying on repeated general terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most of your sentences use simple structures, and the reader can usually follow the main message. There are attempts to connect ideas, as in “Because they have study pressure,” but this is a sentence fragment, and the slash after “pressure/” leaves the thought unfinished. Other errors include “many of people feel” and “Everyone wanted to be first,” where the article or verb form does not fit the sentence. The response also contains run-on or poorly punctuated sentences, such as the opening, where several ideas are joined without clear sentence boundaries. Practise writing complete sentences and combining them with accurate clauses; then check articles, verb forms, and punctuation before submitting.

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