Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some societies, stress is now regarded as a major problem, and it is thought that people suffer from more stress than they did in the past. However, others feel that the amount of stress people have today is exaggerated. They say that previous generations were under more pressure, but the idea of suffering from stress did not exist.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In several societies, stress is now regarded as a massive issue, and it is thought that individual suffer from high stress than they did in the past. However, others feel that the amount of stress people have present is exaggerated. They say that previous generations were under more pressure, but the idea of suffering from stress did not exist.

On the one hand in the past people were in stress condition but not more.

because the individuals were weak finantially, moreover they have not better life due to the fact of in traditional time technology was not developed well for instance, people don not have cars,mobiles,facilities,education and better healthcare.Furthermore the individuals walking with feet to log distance for foods, earnings etc.However they had not better oppertunities,jobs for the life career.Finally like these all issues people have in stressed.

On the other hand at present huge amount of people have in stress because have enormous issues as compared to previous life.Today people have not enough time they are all busy in their works,jobs etc.The big problem for now is that everything is cost expessive in market therefore most individual cannot afford.However people mostly nowadys personal issues for example mostly youngsters have love with girls but at the end that leave the boys alone.Furthermore the are now well developed its also make problem for example online tensions.

In my view people have nowadays in more stress compare with past because have more burden and issuse.

In contrast the people in past was good,they have sincre,genorocity,kindness,good relation but now people mostly living alone they do not like to make relationship, always they just busy in their mobiles and jobs also people have not free time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear opinion that people experience more stress today, and you attempt to discuss both views by contrasting past financial and practical hardships with modern work, living costs and online pressures. However, the comparison is only minimally developed: the claim that people in the past were “in stress condition but not more” is unclear, and the examples about relationships and technology are not explained enough to show how they create greater stress. The response also falls short of the required 250 words: 38 words copied from the prompt were not counted, leaving the response six words short. Develop each side with a specific example and explain how it supports your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic overall structure, with an introduction, two contrasting body sections and a concluding opinion. Phrases such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand” and “In my view” help signal the direction of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow: several points are joined in long strings, while other sentences are fragments, such as “because the individuals were weak finantially.” Linking words including “however” and “furthermore” are sometimes used without a clear logical relationship, and the final paragraph introduces further comparisons rather than neatly concluding the argument. Use one main idea per paragraph, connect each example explicitly to that idea, and make the conclusion summarise your reasoning.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “pressure,” “healthcare,” “opportunities,” “afford” and “online tensions,” so the reader can identify the main areas you want to discuss. However, the range is basic and several inaccurate word choices or spellings make the meaning less clear. For example, “people have in stress,” “cost expessive” and “walking with feet to log distance for foods” are not natural expressions; “finantially,” “oppertunities” and “genorocity” are also misspelled. Try to learn common topic collocations and check word forms and spelling. More precise language would help you explain the causes of stress without relying on vague phrases such as “huge amount of people” and “all issues.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express comparisons and give reasons, including “because” and “due to the fact that,” but sentence structures are very limited and errors occur frequently, sometimes obscuring meaning. Examples include “individual suffer from high stress than they did,” “people have in stress,” and “the people in past was good,” which show problems with agreement, verb forms and sentence construction. Several clauses are incomplete or run together, as in “because the individuals were weak finantially, moreover they have not better life.” Punctuation and spacing also make sentence boundaries unclear. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because,” “although” and “while.”

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