Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below gives information about the five small companies in Britain that came top in a survey of staff conducted by a national newspaper to find out which companies are the best to work for.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

THE FIVE BEST SMALL COMPANIES TO WORK FOR

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The table Illustrates information about the five small companies in Britain by a national newspaper.

Overall, it is evident that under 35s and over 55s recorded the highest figure, whereas staff turnover had the lowest figure. In addition, male: female ratio remained relatively stable through the period.

It is clear from the data, under 35s and over 55s recorded the highest figure at 1st 77%/0%, while 5th rank 93%/0%. This was followed by male: female ratio which stood at 1st 30:70, and 5th 51:49. Over the period, the figure for staff numbers rose steadily from 1st 56% to 5th 190% companies to work for national newspaper. whereas 2nd,3rd was roughly increased, 79% and 72%.

it is worth noting that, staff turnover had a 1st work for 5%, and 5th work for 33%, while 2nd had 18% and 3rd and 4th were 8%, 13%, respectively, furthermore, staff in high income bracket punctual from 1st for 34%, while 2% for in 5th, whereas 2nd and 3rd were increased 48% and 74%, respectively, and last 4th for a 5% were the least work for national newspaper.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to clearly identify or report the main features. The description of the data is confusing and often inaccurate, such as stating '190% companies' or misinterpreting the categories. The comparison between the companies is disjointed, and the information provided is difficult to follow because the data points are not clearly linked to the specific companies (1st, 2nd, etc.). The overview is vague and does not provide a clear summary of the trends. To improve, you must ensure that the data you report matches the visual information provided and that you clearly label which company you are discussing.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the internal logic is weak. The progression of ideas is difficult to follow because the sentences are often disconnected or grammatically incoherent. While some cohesive devices like 'in addition' and 'furthermore' are used, they do not effectively link the ideas. The referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to understand which data point belongs to which company. The structure lacks a logical flow, which hinders the overall readability of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is limited and often used incorrectly. Phrases like 'punctual from 1st for 34%' and 'least work for national newspaper' are confusing and do not accurately describe the data. There is a lack of precision in reporting figures and trends. You need to use more appropriate terminology for describing statistics, such as 'proportion,' 'percentage,' 'increased by,' or 'remained constant.' The current lexical range is insufficient to convey the information clearly, and the errors in word choice frequently impede communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often obscure the meaning. There are issues with sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and the misuse of prepositions. For example, 'staff in high income bracket punctual from 1st for 34%' is not a complete or grammatically correct sentence. The use of punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the placement of commas and periods. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are largely inaccurate. You should focus on writing simple, clear sentences before attempting more complex grammatical forms.

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