Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below gives information about the five small companies in Britain that came top in a survey of staff conducted by a national newspaper to find out which companies are the best to work for.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
THE FIVE BEST SMALL COMPANIES TO WORK FOR
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The table illustrates the information about the five small companies in Britian that came top in a survey of staff conduced by a nationnal newspaper to find out which companies where relevant.
To begin with, the five small compnaies are staff numbers, male:female ratio, undre 35s/over 55s,staff turnover and staff in high income brackets. The staff number highest position was 5th and lowest wad 1th.
Furthermore, the male and female ratio are in rise and fall patterns that is if the male ratio was higher than the female ratio was lower in contrast, if male ratio was lower than the femlae ration was higher. likewise talking about, high income brackets, the highest percentage was 74% in 3rd and the lowest was 2% in 5th. there are more individuals woring under 35s than comparing with over 55s.
Overall, the table represents the five companies survey of staff conducted by a national newspaper whereas, it consits the rise and fall position in survey.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task by mentioning elements of the table, but it fails to provide an accurate overview or a coherent summary of the main features. There are significant misinterpretations of the data; for instance, the writer lists 'staff numbers, male:female ratio' as the five small companies themselves, rather than the categories of data provided for the companies. Furthermore, the statement 'staff number highest position was 5th and lowest wad 1th' misreads the table, where 1st to 5th represent survey rankings, not staff number values. While a few specific figures are correctly cited, such as '74% in 3rd', the overall lack of accurate selection and reporting places this performance at Band 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is divided into paragraphs, and basic cohesive devices such as 'To begin with' and 'Furthermore' are used to link ideas. However, the overall organisation is weak and fails to create a clear progression. The second paragraph lists categories as companies, which breaks logical sequencing. Referencing is frequently unclear, and the links between sentences often feel mechanical or confusing, as seen in the convoluted sentence structure in the third paragraph ('likewise talking about...'). Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal logical flow is severely disrupted by misinterpretation of the data. This corresponds to a Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. There are numerous spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text, including typos ('Britian', 'conduced', 'nationnal', 'compnaies', 'undre', 'woring') and incorrect lexical selection ('staff number highest position was 5th and lowest wad 1th'). The writer attempts some topic-specific vocabulary such as 'staff turnover', 'high income brackets', and 'ratio', but these are undermined by basic errors and misuse. The lexical range is limited and frequently strains the reader's understanding, fitting the descriptor for Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex or compound sentences often result in ungrammatical or incomprehensible structures, such as 'that is if the male ratio was higher than the female ratio was lower in contrast'. There are persistent errors in basic grammar, subject-verb agreement ('the male and female ratio are'), punctuation, and sentence boundaries. These frequent errors cause significant difficulty for the reader and obscure the intended meaning, aligning with Band 4.0.
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