Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below gives information about the five small companies in Britain that came top in a survey of staff conducted by a national newspaper to find out which companies are the best to work for.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

THE FIVE BEST SMALL COMPANIES TO WORK FOR

THE FIVE BEST SMALL COMPANIES TO WORK FOR

Student answer (Band 4.5)

hey,so todays here im going to write about the five best small companies to work for so first we will start by the company standing in 1st position in survey they have 56 staff members in the company and ratio of males=30 and ratio of female staff is=70 its best for the females to work if they wants to work in females surrounding.every staff member in this company are under 35 in age and only 34 percent staff is in high income brackett so now we come to the 2nd company it has 70 staff members and 3rd company therea are 72,4th company 76 and in 5th there are 190 members so i think 5 company is best for the person who likes to work in crowd area from all these 4 last company high ratio of males is of 3rd company and low ratio of males is of 4th company and in 3rd company 74% staffs are in the high income brackett and in 5th only 2 percent staffs are in high income brackett . so these are very good companies and one of my favourite companies i think these companies are best for males and females both and its income also looks too good with great staff ratio.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response4.5
Coherence and Cohesion4.0
Lexical Resource4.5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy4.5
Overall4.5

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the topic and report several relevant figures, including the first company’s 56 employees and 30:70 male-to-female ratio, and the third company’s 74% in the high-income bracket. However, the response only partially summarises the table: there is no clear overview of the main patterns, and some data are inaccurate. The second company has 79 staff, not 70, and “every staff member” at the first company is not under 35; the table says 77%. The claim that the companies are best for particular genders or for people who like crowds is unsupported by the data. Focus on accurate comparisons across the five companies and summarise notable patterns, such as the fifth company’s highest turnover and the third company’s highest high-income share.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response follows the table’s ranking to some extent, moving from the first company to the second and then comparing later companies. This gives the reader a basic sense of sequence. However, the ideas are presented as one long, loosely connected paragraph, with little distinction between an overview and supporting details. Repeated transitions such as “so now we come to” and “so these are” sound conversational and do not clearly show how the comparisons relate. Some references, including “from all these 4 last company,” are difficult to interpret. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and key comparisons, and connect related figures directly—for example, compare staff turnover or income levels across the companies.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use basic vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “staff members,” “ratio,” “position,” and “high income bracket,” so the general subject is usually understandable. However, the range is repetitive and often informal or imprecise for an academic summary. Phrases such as “best for the females to work,” “crowd area,” and “looks too good” express opinions rather than describing the table accurately. There are also noticeable spelling and word-form problems, including “brackett” and “therea.” Aim for concise, neutral reporting language and use terms such as “employees,” “proportion,” and “ranked.” More precise vocabulary will help you describe comparisons without adding unsupported interpretations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to combine information using clauses, for example, “so first we will start by the company standing in 1st position,” but most sentences rely on simple structures or run together, limiting grammatical range. Errors in agreement and sentence construction are frequent: “every staff member … are” should use a singular verb, while “if they wants” has incorrect subject–verb agreement. The opening also shifts awkwardly between “im going to write” and “we will start,” and punctuation is often missing, making sentence boundaries unclear. Practise writing short, complete sentences with accurate articles, agreement, and punctuation before combining them. A controlled comparison structure, such as “The third-ranked company has the highest proportion of high earners,” would improve clarity.

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