Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-07-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
1968 and 2018: average weekly spending by families
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart compare about how parents im single spent their weekly income im one region. Over the period in 1968 and 2018
To commence with, in this chart main things about is Food and fuel power because the comumption of food is highest to the other product in 1968 and in 2018 the average amount was spending but Fuel and power had lowest all about the other expenditure.
On the other hand, in a nation a families was spending 35% of weekly income on food. whereas in 1968 whewe as in 2018 they were utilising total 17 percentage of income. moreover on housing 10 percentage and in 1968 and nearly 20 percentage of weekly incon in 2018 but Fuel and power They were showing less intrest on spend money on fuel and power total nearly 5 percentage weekly income
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Addionaly, 10 percentag to 5 percentage on Clothing and Footwer in both of year 1968 and 2018.
On the other hand, in 1968 and 2018 the total spent salary was 8 per of salary on household goods and but at the same time 8 percent in 1968 and nearly 5 percent in 2018 were using on transport furthermore, the other expenes was leisure thats total expenditure 22 percent of weekly salary in 2018 and 9 percentag in 1968.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response attempts to address the task by comparing spending habits in 1968 and 2018. However, the information is presented in a fragmented and often inaccurate manner. While some data points are mentioned, the overall summary lacks a clear overview of the main trends. For example, the description of fuel and power is confusing, and the comparison of categories like 'leisure' is disjointed. The response fails to clearly highlight the most significant changes, such as the dramatic shift in food expenditure versus the rise in leisure spending. The information is often presented as a list of figures rather than a cohesive analysis of the data provided in the chart.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay lacks a logical structure. While there are attempts at paragraphing, the transitions between ideas are abrupt and often confusing, such as the sudden jump to 'Howev' and the list-like nature of the final paragraph. Cohesive devices are used mechanically or incorrectly, such as 'To commence with' and 'moreover on housing', which do not effectively link the sentences. The progression of ideas is difficult to follow, and the referencing is often unclear, making it hard for the reader to identify which year or category is being discussed at any given moment.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms like 'spending', 'income', and 'percentage'. There are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'comumption of food', 'less intrest on spend money', and 'total spent salary'. The student struggles to use precise terminology to describe trends or data comparisons. While the meaning is generally discernible, the lack of variety and the frequent errors in collocation and spelling (e.g., 'Footwer', 'expenes') significantly limit the ability to convey information with precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and article usage (e.g., 'a families was spending', 'the other expenes was leisure'). The attempt to use complex structures is largely unsuccessful, resulting in run-on sentences or fragments. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and periods, which further disrupts the flow of the text. The majority of sentences contain errors, and the range of structures is very limited, relying mostly on simple, poorly constructed clauses.
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