Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

1968 and 2018: average weekly spending by families

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given chart illustrate the information about how families in one nation utilise their weekly salary between 1968 to 2018.

overall, i can clearly seen that food are highest in this chart while spare takes second place nearly housing.

To begin with this chart,The food was peak in 1968 at 35% and in 2018 fell down 35% to 17%.followed the chart free are higher in 2018 at 22% sligtly decreased in 1968 at 8%.while housing shows in 2018 at 18%dip into 1968 at 10%.

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following this chart transport demonstarets 1968 and 2018 at 7% or 13%clothing and footwear are nearby 10% and 5%.wherease household goods was showed simillar ratio personal goods was 7% or 3% end of this chart fuel and power w

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop the response. While you have identified some main features, the analysis is incomplete, and the final sentence is cut off, leaving the data reporting unfinished. To improve, ensure you provide a clear overview that highlights the most significant trends and support your points with accurate data from the chart. You must also ensure that all categories mentioned in the prompt are addressed. Because the response is under-length and lacks a complete summary of the data, it does not fully address the task requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response lacks a clear logical structure. While there is an attempt at an introduction and body paragraphs, the progression of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'following this chart' and 'to begin with'. Paragraphing is not used effectively to separate distinct ideas, and the lack of a concluding summary makes the overall arrangement feel incomplete. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'furthermore', 'consequently') to connect your sentences and paragraphs more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely on basic verbs like 'shows', 'was', and 'fell', which restricts your ability to describe trends precisely. There are also several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'demonstarets' and 'simillar'. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise vocabulary for describing data trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a significant decline'. Additionally, ensure you use accurate terminology for the categories provided in the chart rather than using vague descriptions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede the reader's understanding. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'food are highest', 'chart illustrate'), incorrect tense usage, and missing articles. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and the attempt at more complex sentences often results in errors that obscure the meaning. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subjects and verbs agree, and proofreading your work to correct simple errors in tense and word order.

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