Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
1968 and 2018: average weekly spending by families
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The given graph demonstrates the seven days of expenditures by all the members of house in 1968 and 2010.
Overall, as the given graph of the percentage of weekly income is fluctuating in both the year. Henceforth, the highest investment is done by food in 1968 conversely, fuel and power had the lowest investment. Consequently, expenses of leisure are the most as compare to fuel and power which is the lowest in 2018.
Moreover,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, as it is only 74 words long. Consequently, the task is not fully addressed. The overview is incomplete, and the response stops abruptly after only two sentences, failing to provide a detailed report of the main features or sufficient comparisons between the two years. To improve, you must ensure you cover all data points, provide a clear summary of trends, and meet the length requirement to allow for a full development of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is too short to demonstrate a logical progression of ideas. While there is an attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'Henceforth', and 'Consequently', these are used incorrectly or in a way that does not contribute to a coherent structure. The text ends abruptly with 'Moreover,' which indicates a lack of planning and completion. To improve, focus on structuring your essay into a clear introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs, using linking words to connect sentences logically rather than mechanically.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The range of vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate. Phrases like 'seven days of expenditures' and 'highest investment is done by food' are unnatural and do not accurately reflect the data provided. The word 'investment' is misused here, as the chart refers to household spending, not financial investment. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to charts and graphs, such as 'expenditure', 'proportion', 'allocated to', and 'accounted for'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains several grammatical errors that impede clarity. For example, 'the percentage of weekly income is fluctuating in both the year' is grammatically incorrect and confusing. There are also issues with word order and sentence structure, such as 'expenses of leisure are the most as compare to fuel'. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. To improve, practice using a variety of complex sentence structures and focus on subject-verb agreement and correct preposition usage.
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