Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

1968 and 2018: average weekly spending by families

Student answer (Band 4.0)

the bar chart shows information about families how they use their weekley money income in 1968 moreover in 2018 it is a comaprision of different types of rates of different thiing

in 1986 the families spent 35 percent and in 2018 families spent 20 percent in 1968 at housing families spent 10 ,percent and 2018 peoples spent more than 20 percent which is good average and at past fuel and power at 7 percent and 2018 it was 5 percent they spent at household goods in 2018 was 7 to 8 percent in 2018 its ratios is same for personal goods in 1968 they spend 8 percent and 2018 they spend less than 5 percent

in 1968 the ratio of food was so high the fact was at that time there was less population but in 2018 the population was a big disaster then housing at 1968 the ratio of housing was low coz there is no neend at 2018 housing is the basic need of human beings

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear overview or a logical summary of the main trends. Several figures are inaccurate or confusingly presented, such as the claim that food spending was 35% in 1986 (the chart shows 1968). The analysis lacks a clear comparison between the two years, and the inclusion of personal opinions about population and 'disaster' is irrelevant to the data provided. To improve, focus on identifying the most significant changes (e.g., the sharp decline in food expenditure) and ensure all data points are accurately transcribed from the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a clear structure. It is written as a single block of text with minimal paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas; sentences are often strung together without logical transitions. The progression of information is disjointed, jumping between categories without a clear pattern. To improve, use clear paragraph breaks for the introduction, overview, and body paragraphs, and employ linking words like 'in contrast,' 'furthermore,' or 'meanwhile' to guide the reader through the data.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are frequent spelling errors (e.g., 'weekley', 'comaprision', 'thiing', 'neend') and misuse of terminology (e.g., 'ratios' instead of 'percentages'). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends or data points effectively. To improve, learn specific collocations for describing charts, such as 'a significant decrease,' 'remained stable,' or 'accounted for,' and focus on accurate spelling of basic terms related to the task.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There is a lack of control over sentence structure, with many run-on sentences and missing punctuation. Verb tense usage is inconsistent, particularly when referring to the two different years. Basic errors in subject-verb agreement and article usage are pervasive. To improve, focus on writing simple, grammatically correct sentences before attempting complex structures, and pay close attention to consistent tense usage when describing historical data.

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