Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

1968 and 2018: average weekly spending by families

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Show the chart below given information about these families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018. The information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons the relevant.

The show of years 1968 to 2018 average weekly spending the family .The year of 1968 show the weekly food income 35% and the year of 2018 show the weekly food income 18%.The year of 1968 sh ow the housing 10% weekly income and the year of 2018 show the housing 19% weekly income . The fuel and power show the year of 1968 show the 7% and the year of 2018 fuel and power of income 5%. The Clothing and footwear show the year of 1968 10% weekly income and the year of 2018 show the 5% weekly income. Than show the household good the year of 1968 and 2018 show the same weekly income 8%. And Show the personal goods the year of 1968 show the weekly income 8% and the year of 2018 14% weekly income.

And the transport show the year of 1968 8% weekly income and the year of 2018 show the weekly 8%. And the leisure show the year of [redacted phone]% and the year of 2018 show the weekly income 8%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to report the data, but it fails to provide a clear overview or identify significant trends. The writing is largely a list of figures rather than a summary, which is a requirement for Task 1. The introduction is confusing, as it copies the prompt instructions rather than paraphrasing them. While most categories are mentioned, the lack of synthesis and the failure to highlight the most striking changes (such as the significant drop in food spending or the rise in leisure) result in an underdeveloped response that does not fully address the requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks logical organization. It is written as a single, dense block of text, which makes it difficult to follow. There is a lack of cohesive devices; the writer relies heavily on repetitive sentence structures like 'The year of 1968 show...' and 'And the...'. There is no clear progression of ideas, and the lack of paragraphing makes the information appear disjointed. The referencing is mechanical and repetitive, failing to guide the reader through the data effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The writer uses the same phrases repeatedly, such as 'weekly income' and 'show the year of'. There is no attempt to use a range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'decreased', 'remained stable', or 'fluctuated'. The word choice is basic and often inaccurate, such as using 'food income' instead of 'expenditure on food'. The lack of variety in lexical items significantly restricts the ability to communicate the data clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede readability. There are persistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The year of 1968 show'), incorrect word order, and missing articles. The sentence structures are extremely simple and repetitive, lacking any complex grammatical forms. Punctuation is also problematic, with inconsistent spacing and capitalization. These errors are frequent and pervasive throughout the text, indicating a very limited control of basic grammatical structures.

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