Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
1968 and 2018: average weekly spending by families
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The stipulated bar-chart depits the information about the how close-knits in one nation spent their weekly salary in 1968 and n 2018.
Overall, it is apparent that in former year the maximal income was spent on food rather than fuel and current. However, in lateral annum uttermost was noticed at free time and marginal experienced at electricity and goods.
By giving a glance, it is crystal clear that in case of having used weekly pay in leisure duration comprised at around 8% in 1968 and nearby 33% in 2018. Whereas, the data stood at nearly 7 in 1968 and just near 14 in 2018 in term of transport system. While, in personal optimistic the data recorded at just above 7% in former year and near 3 in 2018. Moreover, in housinghold pleaseant both remained stable in both year represented at approximately 8%.
Moving further details, in case of clothing and footwear the weekend salary was followed at 10% in first year and 5% in last year.Meanwhile, in electricity the payment of former year was overtaking lateral annum by 3%. Additionaly,in residence the data noticed at 10 and nearly 18 in both year and in food it was accounted at 35%in 1968 and 17% in 2018.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response addresses the main parts of the task by selecting some key features and making comparisons between 1968 and 2018, such as noting the drop in food spending from 35% to 17% and the rise in leisure expenditure. However, the overview is confused and inaccurate, containing unnatural phrasing like 'in former year the maximal income was spent on food rather than fuel and current'. Furthermore, some data points are misreported or difficult to follow due to expression issues, such as stating that household goods remained stable at approximately 8% when the chart shows 8% in both years for household goods, but confusing other categories. The development of ideas is limited and sometimes unclear, which prevents the response from reaching a higher level.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The essay demonstrates some overall organisation with paragraphs attempting to separate different categories of spending. However, there is no clear logical progression throughout the text, and the flow is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions and confusing sentence structures, such as 'Moving further details' and 'By giving a glance'. Cohesive devices are often inadequate or unnatural, and referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended comparisons. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs lacks control, resulting in a mechanical and disjointed progression of ideas.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very limited and often inappropriate for an Academic task. The student relies heavily on highly unnatural, non-standard phrases such as 'close-knits' instead of families, 'lateral annum' for the later year, 'free time' for leisure, and 'housinghold pleaseant'. There are numerous instances of incorrect word choice, word formation, and unnatural collocations that severely strain the reader and impede communication. Spelling and lexical control remain basic and restricted throughout the response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The range of grammatical structures is limited, relying mostly on simple frameworks with frequent failed attempts at complex sentences. There are constant errors in grammar and sentence architecture throughout the text, such as missing articles, incorrect prepositions ('in term of transport system', 'in personal optimistic'), and faulty subject-verb agreements. These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and reflect a weak control over basic and complex grammatical forms alike.
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