Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

1968 and 2018: average weekly spending by families

Student answer (Band 4.5)

As in the given chart it is shown that in the 1968 the families spent thier weekly incom as we see firstly about the food that there is the 35 % of food spent by families in 1968 ,Housing is about the 10% ,fule and power is about almost 6 % and some percent ,cooking and footware is about the 10 % , house hold goods is 5 8% and some and the personal goods also as same as the household goods and transport is also the same as the consective previuos both at the last the leisure is aout te 5 and somthing but greater than that of three. Now in the case of 2018 we obsorbed that families spent food in a week is 15 point somthimg ,housing is about near almost 19% ,fule and power is uses in the percent is 4% ,clothing and footware is about 5% ,household goods is 8% ,personal goods is about 4% ,tranport is 14% and at last leisure is 22%.Here i mentioned all the possible percents which is used by the families of a country in 1968 and in 2018 by describing all these thing i obsorbed that there is a food is th one of the most uses thing in 1968 while in 2018 there is a some percent .Comperision between the other thing which is highly used in 2018 is Liesure while in 1968 it use at some extent .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant categories and include many figures, such as food at 35% in 1968 and housing at about 19% in 2018. You also recognise the broad contrast that food was prominent in 1968 while leisure was highest in 2018. However, the response only partially summarises the chart: there is no clear, concise overview of the main changes, and the figures are sometimes inaccurate or unclear. For example, 2018 food is reported as “15 point somthimg” rather than about 17%, and 1968 household goods is given as “5 8%” instead of 8%. The comparison between years is underdeveloped. Group the largest rises and falls and state the key overall pattern clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response follows a basic sequence, first discussing 1968 and then 2018, and uses a few signposts such as “Now” and “at last.” This gives the reader some sense of the chart’s categories. However, the information is packed into very long, loosely connected sentences, so the progression is difficult to follow. The opening sentence runs through nearly all 1968 figures without clear boundaries, and the final comparison repeats earlier points rather than drawing them together. Some linking phrases, including “by describing all these thing,” do not clearly show how the ideas relate. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and the detailed comparisons, and organise figures into meaningful groups rather than listing every category in one sentence.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “weekly income,” “percent,” “spent,” and category names such as “housing” and “transport.” This shows a basic ability to discuss the data. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the meaning difficult to interpret, for example “cooking and footware,” “consective previuos,” and “Liesure.” Phrases such as “some percent” and “15 point somthimg” are imprecise and unsuitable for reporting chart values. Aim for accurate category labels and standard comparison language, such as “rose,” “fell,” “accounted for,” and “whereas.” Proofreading spelling and using precise percentage expressions would make the report clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There are attempts to connect ideas and form longer sentences, but the response relies heavily on extended sentence chains, and these are often faulty. For example, “As in the given chart it is shown that in the 1968 the families spent thier weekly incom” has an unclear structure and unnecessary article use. In “families spent food in a week is 15 point somthimg,” the verb pattern is not grammatical, while “there is a food is th one” combines incompatible structures. Articles, verb forms, agreement, and punctuation are frequently inaccurate, which makes some relationships between ideas hard to follow. Build shorter, complete sentences first, then add controlled comparisons using forms such as “Food accounted for…” and “Leisure rose from… to…”.

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