Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

1968 and 2018: average weekly spending by families

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In The bar charts provide key information about families in one country spent their weekly between 1968 and 2018 , the units mesaured percentages .

Overall , it is clear from the bars charts that the families have the most spent on food in 1968 they reach the peak one into 35% , however the same are fall low than tweenty % , next it is housing are grow dramaticly between as years in 10% into approximactly 20% .

According in the what is show its easy to say that fiel and power and clothing and footware transport stay whit fluctuate percentags the househould had a equal percentags between 1963 and 2018 as the same , furthemore personl goods was decrease to be just under 5 % whit this information she got the reach low one whit all averge.

Moreover, leisure have rised significalty to approximactly 10% to be morethan 20%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several important patterns, especially the fall in food spending from about 35% to 17%, the rise in housing from 10% to around 19%, and the increase in leisure to over 20%. These comparisons show a relevant understanding of the chart. However, the overview is not consistently clear, and some details are inaccurate or too vague: fuel and power and clothing did not fluctuate, but both declined; transport rose from 8% to 14%; and household goods stayed at 8%, rather than being described as equal across 1963 and 2018. The response also does not clearly organise the main changes into a complete summary. Report the largest rises and falls accurately, and distinguish categories that changed from those that remained stable.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: the response begins with an introduction, gives an overall statement, and then adds further comparisons. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “however,” and “Moreover” help signal relationships between ideas. Nevertheless, progression is difficult to follow because several categories are crowded into one long sentence, and connections between them are unclear. For example, the sentence beginning “According in the what is show” moves from fuel and clothing to transport, household goods, and personal goods without clearly separating the comparisons. Some linking words are also used awkwardly, so they do not reliably clarify the logic. Use shorter, clearly grouped sentences—for example, one for the main increases and another for decreases and stable figures—and make each reference to a category explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary suited to describing data, including “peak,” “decrease,” “fluctuate,” and “rised,” and you use percentage language to compare the years. However, the range is limited and many spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the report difficult to understand, such as “mesaured,” “dramaticly,” “approximactly,” and “personl goods.” Some phrases are not natural for chart description, including “the same are fall low” and “the reach low one.” Choose precise verbs and collocations, and check spelling carefully. For example, describe a figure as “fell to 17%” or “rose to approximately 22%,” rather than using unclear constructions. Accurate category names are also important when reporting the chart.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to use both simple and more extended sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “however” and “between,” but control is inconsistent. Frequent problems with sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation sometimes obscure the intended comparisons. For instance, “the families have the most spent on food” has an incorrect verb construction, while “leisure have rised” does not show correct subject–verb agreement or verb form. Several sentences run together, making it hard to identify where one idea ends and another begins. Practise building accurate basic comparison sentences first, such as “Food accounted for 35% in 1968, but this fell to 17% in 2018.” Then add subordinate clauses only when the sentence remains grammatically controlled.

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