Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

1968 and 2018: average weekly spending by families

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The provided barchart give the information about the how families in one country spend their weekly income in [redacted phone]

Overall it is lucid that the food was the maximum in the given information while other are remain minimum

fetiching into details the food was the biggest average weekly spending by family accounted at 35 % folled by hosehold goods were same accounted at 6% and when it comes to the leisure it was the less least spending by familiy accouted at 8% at the begining and besid this it rose 22% moreover when it comes to the personal goods first it was shown that increase at 85 and afterthat it takes downfall accounted at 4% in the given information

consedering the remaining detail the foood was the biggest in the chart followed to the and when it nagain come to the clothing and footware first it increase afterthat it decline moreover the fuel and power was the least weekly spending by family and the last was hosing in the begining housing was take decline and aft that it was increased

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify food as a major category and notice that leisure rises to 22% in 2018, so some relevant features are selected. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: food is highest in 1968, but leisure—not food—is highest in 2018. Several figures are misreported or confused: household goods are 8% in both years, not 6%, and personal goods fall from 8% to 4%, rather than increasing to “85.” The response also gives little reliable comparison across the chart; for example, housing rises from 10% to 19%, while transport rises from 8% to 14%. To improve, state the main changes accurately in the overview, then compare the largest increases and decreases using correct figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response with an opening, an overview beginning “Overall,” and detail sections introduced by “fetching into details” and “considering the remaining detail.” This gives the reader some sense of a report structure. However, ideas are not arranged in a clear progression: categories are revisited, figures and trends are mixed together, and several statements are difficult to follow, such as “the food was the biggest in the chart followed to the and when it nagain come to…” Linking words such as “moreover” and “afterthat” are repeated or do not show a clear relationship. Group the categories by their changes, use one paragraph for the overview and one or two for comparisons, and connect each point explicitly.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “weekly spending,” “accounted at,” “increase,” and “decline,” showing an attempt to describe chart data. However, the range is basic and several word choices or spellings make the meaning hard to understand: “lucid” is not a natural way to introduce an overview, “the less least spending” is awkward, and “hosehold,” “consedering,” and “familiy” are misspelled. Phrases such as “the maximum” and “the least weekly spending” are also imprecise for describing categories. Use standard chart language consistently, such as “accounted for,” “the largest share,” “fell,” and “remained unchanged,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt longer sentences and use some past-tense forms, but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently make relationships between ideas unclear. The opening, “The provided barchart give the information about the how families…,” has problems with subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence construction. Other examples include “other are remain minimum” and “the food was the biggest average weekly spending by family accounted at 35%,” where the sentence structure and verb patterns are faulty. Punctuation is also largely absent, causing several ideas to run together. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses; check agreement, articles, verb forms, and full stops in each sentence.

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