Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

1968 and 2018: average weekly spending by families

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The bar chart illustrates about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

Overall, in families spent their weeklymoney according to the income in 1968 and in that era the weekly source of income was very little and in 2018 income increased and their money expense is also risk with the money.

Gradually, in 1968 in family only one person in the whole could goes to the work and some goes to the business to the market. This system of earning money for their complete famliy was enough at that time. In 1968 the population of the country was less in number and their of income was little at that era. People lived their happy and wonderful life with their neigbhours. In 2018,suddenly, the level of population increased and also their source of income is risk and the diseases decreased by medicine. Nowadays many people support their family and relatives by providing better advice and suggestion about the work.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The opening identifies the chart’s subject and the two years, but the response does not summarise the chart’s spending data. The overview instead claims that income increased and discusses population, employment, health and family support; none of these points is shown in the visual. No spending categories or comparisons are reported, such as food falling from about 35% to 17%, or leisure rising from about 9% to 22%. This makes the response largely off-topic for an Academic Task 1 report and leaves the main features unaddressed. To improve, describe the largest changes and a few relevant figures, then avoid explanations or claims that cannot be read from the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, an attempted overview and a further paragraph. The opening also signals the two time points, giving the reader a starting point. However, the ideas do not progress as a chart summary: the overview moves to income levels, while the final paragraph shifts to population, disease and advice. These points are not linked to the visual, so the overall line of development is difficult to follow. Connect each paragraph to the chart—for example, give an overview of the main spending shifts, then group categories that rose or fell. Use time references and comparison words to make those relationships clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The response uses some topic-related vocabulary, including “weekly income,” “population,” “source of income” and “medicine,” and the reader can recognise that it concerns families over time. However, much of the vocabulary is either unrelated to the chart or imprecise for describing data. Phrases such as “weekly source of income was very little” and “money expense is also risk” do not clearly express spending proportions or trends. There are also spelling errors, including “famliy” and “neigbhours.” Build a small set of accurate chart terms—such as “accounted for,” “proportion,” “rose” and “declined”—and use them with the categories and figures shown.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There are attempts to form longer sentences and use time clauses, as in “In 2018, suddenly, the level of population increased and also their source of income is risk.” The opening sentence is also a clear simple structure. However, control is inconsistent: “in families spent” lacks a grammatical subject, “one person … could goes” combines incompatible verb forms, and “in 2018 income increased” shifts tense awkwardly within a past-time comparison. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also uneven, with extra spacing and a comma attached directly to “2018.” Practise accurate past-tense comparisons and build sentences around a clear subject and verb before adding clauses.

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