Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.

Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In modern era, the international travel becomes so easy and through the social media people know about other country culture and made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in foreign countries.

In this paragraph i discuss the advantages one by one. So, the first main advantage is that it promotes the cross-culture understanding. In the past, many people judges foreign people on the basis of rumours, misconception and stereotypes. Today's through travel vlogs, documentries, movies and different series the culture of other countries has showed many times and people can easily see how people greet with eachother and how they live, eat and celebrate festivals.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies one relevant advantage: greater cross-cultural understanding, supported by examples such as travel videos, documentaries, films and series showing greetings, food and festivals. However, it does not answer the central question of whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages: there is no discussion of disadvantages and no clear comparative position. The ideas are also only briefly introduced, with no developed explanation or specific evidence. The response contains 97 words, so it is 153 words below the required minimum; this leaves too little space to address the task fully. To improve, state your position in the introduction, develop both advantages and disadvantages in separate paragraphs, and explain why one side is stronger, using relevant examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic sequence from an introductory statement to an advantage, and the signposting phrase “the first main advantage” helps the reader recognise the paragraph’s focus. The examples that follow are broadly connected to the point about cultural understanding. However, the response is too short to establish a clear overall progression or organise the full argument, and “In this paragraph i discuss the advantages one by one” is a process announcement rather than a useful link between ideas. The opening also repeats the task’s idea without leading clearly into a position. Build a complete essay with an introduction, logically ordered body paragraphs and a conclusion; use linking expressions to show contrast and comparison, not just sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant topic vocabulary, including “cross-culture understanding,” “stereotypes,” “travel vlogs” and “celebrate festivals,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is narrow because the response develops only one point, and several word choices or forms are inaccurate or unnatural: “cross-culture” would be better expressed as “cross-cultural,” while “documentries” and “eachother” are misspelled. Phrases such as “the culture of other countries has showed many times” also do not express the intended idea naturally. Aim for more precise collocations and a wider range of language for discussing both benefits and drawbacks, such as cultural exchange, cultural misrepresentation and loss of privacy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and a longer sentence explaining how media can show cultural practices, so there is some variety in sentence structure. However, grammatical control is inconsistent. For example, “In modern era” needs an article, “the international travel becomes” has an unsuitable article and verb form, and “many people judges” has a subject–verb agreement error. In “the culture of other countries has showed,” the verb form is incorrect, and the sentence beginning “Today's through…” is not well formed. Capitalisation is also inconsistent, as “i” should be “I.” Practise accurate articles, agreement and past participles, and revise longer sentences so their clauses are clearly connected.

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