Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.

Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries is that international travel is to meet their dears on their differents events, This advantages is that if our some close friend or our family member in the other countries and they have their some mis happening in their life then he use the media to inform their close person that soleve their issue so he use the media and talk them then the other person use the internation travel and reach their on time that is a big banefit of mass media and international travel, that is a big source of our life in our generations media have some disadvantages, its disadvantages is that some people in the world miss use the media that that is loss the other persons like use the differents sources for trap and scam the people like the expert of media use the media and scam the differents countries of citizens then their hack the mobile , banks accounts wattsapp, and others that a use in daily life then he loss the citizen that is a big disadvantages about this ,the hacker cotact the citizen that fake call and make underesimate and others differents examples in the worlds on the the social media. My opinion is that international travel and mass media have gives the more advantages then less disadvantages.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a relevant example involving family or friends abroad, media communication, and international travel, and you state a position at the end: the advantages are greater. However, the response only partially addresses the question. The example mainly describes how travel and media can help in an emergency, while the disadvantage of scams and hacking is mentioned without comparing its impact with the benefits. Your position is not clearly developed throughout, and the ideas need explanation and support. The response is 216 words, so it is 34 words below the 250-word minimum; 36 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop both sides with specific examples and explain why one outweighs the other.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic overall direction: you introduce a benefit, then a disadvantage, and finish with your opinion. This gives the reader some sense of the response’s intended structure. However, the ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs, and the long run-on sentences make it difficult to follow how one point connects to the next. For example, the benefit sentence moves from family emergencies to media use and travel without clear breaks or explanation. Linking words such as “then” and “that is” are repeated, while references such as “he” and “their” are sometimes unclear. Use separate paragraphs for the advantages, disadvantages, and conclusion, and connect each point with clear, varied transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “international travel,” “mass media,” “scam,” and “hack,” so the reader can identify the main subject of your examples. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and frequent spelling and word-choice errors strain understanding. Phrases such as “their dears,” “mis happening,” and “big banefit” are not natural or accurate in this context; “close relatives,” “misfortune,” and “major benefit” would be clearer. “Use the media” is repeated rather than replaced with more precise expressions such as “communicate online” or “share information.” Build a wider set of accurate terms for communication, travel, cultural awareness, and online fraud, and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express connected ideas and give reasons, but sentence structures are very limited and errors are frequent, sometimes making relationships between ideas difficult to understand. The opening runs several clauses together without clear sentence boundaries, and the sentence beginning “its disadvantages is that” has problems with subject–verb agreement and clause structure. Verb forms are also inaccurate in “have gives” and “then he use,” while pronouns shift between “our,” “he,” and “their.” Punctuation is insufficient, especially in the long sentences about scams and hacking. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine ideas using accurate clauses and conjunctions; check agreement, verb forms, and sentence boundaries.

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