Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.

Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries. although the international travel and varoius kinds of mass media offer clear advantages such as 1 and 2, i argue that these are much more significant than resulted drawbacks.

On the one hand, there are several reasons why advantage of this development outweigh the disadvantage such as consumption of time and money. First, for the ease of international travel people can easily travel around the world within few hours because modern technology offers air plane and private jet. Although it can be expensive , the price of ticket vary on different types of sit such as business class and standerd class. Second, with the help of various kinds of media in the recent time money can be saved . For exqmple, nowadays people do not have to purchase a newspaper and a broadcast subcription to know about others live all over the world. they can use know everything through the mass media and internet.

On the other hand, while the topic offer some advantages, it can create also multiple challenges for individuals and society. First, using the advantage of media people live can be on danger and it can be a problem for others. For example, in the world nowadays, people often get difficulties such as murder and robber. it is common for recent time if someting goes viral with media it face several crux afterwards.

In conclusion, while the ease of international travel and mass media has made several positive contributions, it is also responsible for several drawbacks such as safety issue and lack of private life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a position in the introduction, saying the advantages are more significant, and the conclusion recognises both benefits and drawbacks. However, the argument only partially answers the comparison in the question: the advantages are mainly about travel convenience and saving money on news, while the disadvantages are briefly linked to safety and privacy without explaining how they arise or why they outweigh less than the benefits. The phrases “such as 1 and 2” and “lack of private life” leave key points vague, and the example about murder and robbery is not clearly connected to learning about life in other countries. Develop two relevant advantages and disadvantages with specific explanations, and make the weighing of them explicit. The response meets the required length; 36 words copied from the prompt were excluded from the count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable introduction, two body paragraphs presenting opposing sides, and a conclusion. “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” help signal the change in direction, and the ideas are grouped broadly by viewpoint. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven: the first body paragraph moves from travel time to ticket prices and then to media costs without clearly showing how these points support the overall comparison. Some links are mechanical or unclear, such as “while the topic offer some advantages” and “it face several crux afterwards.” The conclusion repeats the general contrast but does not resolve it clearly. Use topic sentences that state each paragraph’s main claim, then connect each example directly to that claim with clear referencing and explanation.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “international travel,” “mass media,” “broadcast subscription,” and “private life,” so the topic is generally identifiable. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or unclear choices make parts difficult to understand. For example, “people live can be on danger,” “others live all over the world,” and “it face several crux afterwards” do not express the intended meanings naturally. There are also spelling errors such as “varoius,” “standerd,” and “exqmple,” alongside repeated general words such as “people,” “media,” and “advantages.” Build a more precise set of phrases for discussing cultural awareness, privacy, safety, and access to information, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a concession with “Although it can be expensive” and a contrast beginning “while the topic…”. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. Examples include “the price of ticket vary,” “people do not have to purchase… they can use,” and “it is common for recent time if something goes viral.” These show problems with articles, subject–verb agreement, sentence boundaries, and clause construction. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, particularly at the starts of sentences and around commas. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly formed subordinate clause, then check agreement, articles, and punctuation before adding more complex structures.

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