Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.

Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In my opinion, yes, there are indeed more advantages of international travel and mass media than disadvantages. If I had to put examples of our society and how it has changed, due to social media, it is easier to compare at what pace the world is moving today. It boradens your horizons and helps you to deal with various societal issues. You get a fresher point of view of how humans are living their lives across the world. International travel on the other hand is not just enjoyable to the traveller. It helps the viewr to visit a location through the eyes of the traveller. It also helps to clear out many stereotypes that people might have of various regions. It has also made us gain a more humane perspective to it all. Because, when you get to witness people who are struggling across nations, you can directly voice your concerns and speard awareness to help them. For example, during the student movement in Bangladesh, people spead the news online. That helped to create international pressure on the government to refrain from conducting violent acts against students. It creates accountability. Now, cultural appropriation is a factor that can not be overlooked. However, in recent times it is clearly seen that people are trying to create a better environment online. It has normalized the coexistence of people from various ethinicities, nationalities, race, religion on a single platform. The world as a whole has become more connected. As a result, it has become easier to relate with people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the opening: you believe the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. You develop relevant benefits, including broader perspectives, challenging stereotypes, and using online attention to create accountability, with the Bangladesh student movement as an example. You also acknowledge cultural appropriation, so both sides of the question are touched on. However, the disadvantage is only named, not explained, and some benefits—such as travel helping viewers see places through a traveller’s eyes—need clearer reasoning. To strengthen the response, explain a specific drawback and weigh it against the benefits, while developing the example with more precise detail about how international awareness led to pressure or change.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an overall progression from your position, through several advantages, to a concession about cultural appropriation and a concluding idea about connection. Linking phrases such as “On the other hand,” “For example,” and “As a result” help signal relationships between points. However, the ideas are presented in one continuous paragraph, making the shifts between social media, travel, activism, and cultural appropriation harder to follow. Some links are also unclear: “It has also made us gain a more humane perspective to it all” does not clearly identify what “it” refers to, and “Because” begins a sentence that depends on the previous one. Use separate paragraphs for the main benefits and the drawback, and make references explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of topic-related vocabulary, including “stereotypes,” “accountability,” “cultural appropriation,” and “coexistence,” which helps communicate ideas beyond basic description. There are also some imprecise or unnatural choices that limit clarity and control. For example, “compare at what pace the world is moving” is not a natural way to express the idea, and “clear out many stereotypes” would be better expressed as challenging or dispelling them. Spelling errors such as “boradens,” “viewr,” “speard,” and “ethinicities” are noticeable, although the intended meanings are generally recoverable. Aim for more precise collocations and proofread carefully, especially for commonly used topic vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including conditional phrasing (“If I had to put examples…”) and a subordinate clause beginning “when you get to witness…”. Most of the message remains understandable, but some sentence structures and punctuation need more control. “If I had to put examples of our society and how it has changed, due to social media, it is easier…” is awkwardly constructed, while “Because, when you get to witness…” is an incomplete sentence and has an unnecessary comma after “Because.” The list “ethnicities, nationalities, race, religion” also needs more consistent grammatical forms. Build clearer clauses and check that each sentence has a complete main clause.

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