Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.

Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Modern technology has made it very easy to travel international. It has also propelled the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world. Due to these advancements people are now more aware about how people live in other countries. Some perople believe it is a good think that we can now know much more about how people live in other countries as it allows us to know about diffierent cultures. On the other hand many people have opposing views about this. I firmly argree with the former view.

When people travel to another country or come across some news about other countries, they see the cultures and customs of those people. Sometime they get influenced by seeing or experiencing those cultures and try to practice those cultures in their home country. For example, Japan is known for its hospitality, neat and cleaness and hard working culture. So, a person visiting Japan may get influenced and try to introduce the hardworking or hospitality culture in his own country.

Again, many believe these mix of culture can also cause harm to the society. A prime example of this would be the mixture of western cloathing culture in Bangladesh. Many bangladeshi see western cloathing practices as an insult to their own culture and strongly oppose the idea of integrating such cultures into the bangladeshi society.

Overall, seeing both the sides, I believe the knowledge of how people live in another country would benifit us. It would eventually lead to globalization of many cultures and promote uniformity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear opinion in the introduction (“I firmly agree with the former view”) and return to it in the conclusion, while addressing both a benefit and a possible drawback. However, the response only partially answers whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages: the benefit of cultural learning is illustrated, but the opposing view is presented mainly as a concern about clothing, with little explanation of its wider effects or why the benefit is more important. The conclusion’s claim that cultural exchange promotes “uniformity” is also not explained. The response is 244 words, six words below the required minimum; this limits the space available to develop and support your ideas. Extend the comparison and explain the examples more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction, a paragraph about cultural influence, a paragraph presenting a concern, and a concluding opinion. Linking expressions such as “On the other hand,” “Again,” and “Overall” make the direction of the discussion easy to follow. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. “Again” does not clearly signal the contrast that follows, and “these mix of culture” has an unclear reference. The second body paragraph also moves quickly from the general concern to the Bangladesh example without explaining the link in detail. To strengthen progression, use more precise transitions and develop each paragraph from its main point through explanation to the example and its relevance to your overall judgement.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including topic-related terms such as “mass media,” “customs,” “integrating,” and “globalization.” There are also attempts at more specific description, for example “hospitality” and “hardworking culture.” However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, including “perople,” “diffierent,” “argree,” “benifit,” and “cloathing.” Some phrases are also imprecise or unnatural, such as “travel international,” “neat and cleaness,” and “a good think.” These do not prevent the reader from understanding the main argument, but they reduce accuracy and flexibility. Check spelling carefully and learn common collocations as complete phrases, such as “travel internationally” and “a positive development.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including a conditional example (“a person visiting Japan may get influenced”) and a subordinate clause beginning “When people travel to another country.” Most of the meaning remains clear, but some grammatical errors occur. For example, “people are now more aware about how people live” uses an incorrect preposition, while “many believe these mix of culture” has a number-agreement problem. The sentence beginning “Some people believe…” is also difficult to manage because it combines several ideas without clear punctuation. Aim for more controlled complex sentences, check singular and plural agreement, and use punctuation to separate the main claim from its explanation. This will improve accuracy while preserving variety.

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