Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-07-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.
Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The international travel are easy for today and the various kind of mass media provide you the knowledge of other country . The outweight advantage of mass media and travel international than disadvantage such threw news and internet you can get information to other countries. This essay will discuss both view,i understand that mass media is the predominent source of gain knowledge about other country.
On the one hand ,international travel is more easy nowadays .The reason to travel easily is technology airplan, ships and private jat
.For example ,today generation are very commute ,you can contact others countries people threw social media ,you can make international friends on the internet.Moreover,you can assess any country knowledge on the internet.However, mass media is the enormous way to gain kmowledge.In addition, mass media like news channel ,new paper are tell you about other countries conditions.
on the other hand,,it has disadvantage to due to travel far ,it is impossible to meet your love one on daily basis.For Instance, People are so busy to theirr work, ,if you are a travel you dont have time to meet any one .Farthermore,the other disadvantage is mass media ,some time internet provide false information to get view,news channel provide wrong news to distract people from the real issue . The consequence is both international travel and mass media have disadvantge to.
The easy travel and spread various kinds of mass media have advantege and disadvantage.The easy international travel throw airplan ,meet new people and know about other countries due to internet are beneficial but these things harmful to such as tell fall information , meet with dangerous people.In my point of view ,the advantage of this development outweight the disadvantages.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of international travel and mass media, ultimately taking a position. However, the development of ideas is limited. Many points, such as the mention of 'private jets' or 'false information', are introduced but not sufficiently explained or supported with concrete examples. The essay tends to repeat the same general points rather than extending them. While the position is clear in the conclusion, the overall argument lacks the depth required for a higher band. To improve, focus on developing each paragraph with a clear topic sentence followed by a detailed explanation and a specific, real-world example.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'on the other hand' and 'moreover'. There are also issues with referencing; for example, the transition between ideas within paragraphs is sometimes abrupt, making the progression of thought feel disjointed. The punctuation, particularly the use of commas and spacing, is inconsistent, which occasionally hinders the flow of the text. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'easy', 'good', and 'bad', and there are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'today generation are very commute' and 'assess any country knowledge'. Some words are misspelled, such as 'predodent' (predominant), 'kmowledge' (knowledge), and 'airplan' (airplane). While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of precision and the presence of spelling errors restrict the range of vocabulary. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary and ensure correct spelling of common terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement ('international travel are easy'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper grammatical control, such as 'The outweight advantage of mass media and travel international than disadvantage such threw news'. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often faulty, which can cause difficulty for the reader. The punctuation is also problematic, with frequent missing or misplaced commas. Focusing on basic sentence construction and ensuring subject-verb agreement would be a good starting point for improvement.
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