Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-14
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.
Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The mode of technology shows how the foreign country giving information by media in all over the world and it made it more accurate than ever for individual to understand how individuals live in diffrent nation . This statement has some advantages but outwight the disadvantages and explain in the forthcoming paragraphs.
On the one hand, when media shows the news of other state it will benefit for poeple to ehance the knowledge about every park of the earth.To explain, news channel is sometimes advantageous for society to shows the real condition of the other country or it will provide through images which give more exact real time updates.For example, A multinnational news reporter shows hows the condiction wheather in paris and how it will effect on your trip but when people see this news they dropped their plans for the vacations. As a result , it will saves the money of tourists and give knowledge like locals.
On the other hand, it will reflect the condition of economy or ongoing situation of the country. due to this, they developed a serious problem for native people which badly affected from this.For instance, an article shows why people nervous fromm news reporters beacuse they will always show a inappropriate news. People suffer from news when they stuck in wrong situation.
In conclusion, technology has benefitted for country to gathered information about their neighbor country but sometimes it will effect on people lives and give more burden on their shoulders to survive in tough condiction.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt, but the development of ideas is limited and at times unclear. While you state that advantages outweigh disadvantages, the arguments provided are somewhat superficial. For example, the point about tourists dropping plans due to weather reports is not fully linked to the broader concept of international understanding. The second paragraph regarding the economy is vague, and the connection between media and the 'serious problem' for native people is not well-explained. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and provides more logical, detailed evidence to support your position.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed. While you use some cohesive devices like 'On the one hand' and 'In conclusion', the internal flow within paragraphs is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear referencing. For instance, the transition between the media's role and the economic impact is abrupt. To achieve a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words more naturally and ensure that each sentence logically follows the previous one to create a smoother narrative flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and there are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'mode of technology' instead of 'advancements in technology' and 'diffrent nation' (spelling). You rely on basic vocabulary, and some phrases are used incorrectly, such as 'give more burden on their shoulders'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of precision and the presence of spelling errors (e.g., 'multinnational', 'condiction', 'beacuse') hinder the overall quality. Expanding your vocabulary to include more academic collocations and focusing on accurate spelling will significantly improve your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There is a limited range of grammatical structures, and the essay contains frequent errors in sentence construction, verb tense, and subject-verb agreement. For example, 'it will benefit for poeple to ehance' should be 'it benefits people by enhancing'. Many sentences are simple or contain structural errors that occasionally impede clarity, such as 'they developed a serious problem for native people which badly affected from this'. To improve, practice using complex sentence structures like relative clauses and conditional sentences, and pay closer attention to basic grammar rules like articles and prepositions.
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