Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-14
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.
Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
People to how the people live who are in other countries, it is possible or ease through international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media Al over the world . In this essay I shall explore it give give a good impact on the people or not
If the people look towards the life style of other countries people they loss their hopes sometimes because they want to make own life style like them . They each and every thing to take those type life style . For instance that if the poor child look towards them he also want to take those life but in reality they do not on their goal because they do not have o lot of money . To become rich in night so they adopt the wrong like that they adopt the profession of robbery.they adopt only this profession because their parents do not make them able to earn money from other resources due to the lack of money . So this make bad impact on them
On the second prospective, this thing is good for people especially for young generation because it gave the new idea how can we take second step in our life . If look towards them they start to move them like their life style . They adopt good thing from them . They start to change their selves and become like them . They learn more things from them like confidence, good manners and stylish life style . It gave good impact on them.
At the end , we should need watch the both ways for example every people have two face first one is physical appearance and the second one is character, like that we should need to look both ways.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing both the negative and positive impacts of global awareness. However, the development of ideas is limited and often repetitive. The argument regarding the 'poor child' turning to robbery is a significant over-generalization and lacks logical depth, making the position feel underdeveloped. While the essay attempts to cover both sides, the lack of a clear, consistent stance throughout the response makes it difficult for the reader to follow the argument. To improve, you should focus on providing more nuanced, logical examples and ensure your position is clearly stated in the introduction and maintained throughout the body paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. Transitions between sentences are often mechanical or missing, such as the abrupt shift in the second paragraph. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate, which disrupts the flow of ideas. For example, the phrase 'On the second prospective' is used incorrectly to introduce a new point. Referencing is also unclear at times, making it difficult to track the subject of the sentences. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that connects logically to the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits the expression of complex ideas. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'take those type life style' and 'To become rich in night'. These errors occasionally impede communication, as the reader must infer the intended meaning. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to discuss the topic with any degree of precision or sophistication. To reach a higher band, you should work on learning collocations (words that naturally go together) and expanding your range of academic vocabulary to replace simple, repetitive terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include incorrect verb forms ('they loss their hopes'), missing articles, and awkward phrasing that makes sentences difficult to parse ('People to how the people live who are in other countries'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with irregular spacing around punctuation marks. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focus on mastering subject-verb agreement, sentence structure, and basic punctuation to improve clarity.
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