Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.
Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
I would talk about the people live in others countries . They have both advantages and disadvantages because some people change our life and travel different countries for basics purpose. For example better study better life style.
The advantages of of INTERNATIONAL TRAVEL AND THE SPREAD OF VARIOUS KINDS OF MEDIA ALL OVER THE WORLD HAVE MADI IT MORE PSSIBILE TO CHANGE OUR LIFE STYLE EXAMPLE EUROPEAN COUNTRIES HAVE DIFFERENT CULTURE DIFFERENT LIFE STYLE .THE PEOPLE WHO LIVE IN EUROPEAN COUNTRY WHO WORKED SOME HOURS AND COLLECT LOT OF MONEY AND EUROPEAN COUNTRIES HAVE MINIMUM TAXES THAT WHY THE PEOPLE BOTH HAPPY.MEDIA SPREADS NEWS ABOUT CULTURE AND DIFFICULT TIMES .SO WE HARMED WITH HIM AND HELP THE PEOPLE
THE DISADVANTAGES OF MEDIA THEY HAVE NO PRIVACY .IN MUSLIM COUNTRY THE PEOPLE LIKE EUROPEAN COUNTRY CUTURE LIKE CHRIMISTAS AND VALENTINE DAY .THE ALSO TRY APPLY THIS CULTURE AND SOME TIMES THE PEOPLE DO ANY THINGS THAT HAVE DONOT ALLOW IN OUR COUNTRY .SOME TIMES MEDIA SPREAD WRONG NEWS ABOUT DIFFERENT RELIGION AND COUNTRY .THIS NEWS CAUSES OF DIFFERENT DIFFICULT ABOARD STUDENR , DAMAGE RELATIONSHIP AND DESTOYRE AND EFFECT OF WORLD PEACE .
IN COLOUSION I THINK SO MEDIA SPREADS ONLY REAL NEWS AND SOME TIMES PEOPLE DO WRONG THINK BUT MEDIA TRY DONOT PUBLISH ANY THING WHO DAMGE THE PEACE OF RELIGION AND COUNTRY . BUT SOME TIME WE LEARNED ABOUT DIFFERENT COUNTRIES WHO THE PEOPHE LIVE TOGETHER WITHOUT ANY FIGHTS AND WHO THE PEOPLE LIVED AND CHANGING OUR LIFE MIDDEL CLASS TO UPPER CLASS ANS LOT OF THINGS . MEDIA HAVE BOTH ADVANATAGES AND SOME NEWS ARE GOOD FOR US AND BAD FOR US BUT MEDIA TRY PUBLISH REAL AND TRUTH THINGS
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing both advantages and disadvantages of international travel and media. However, the development of ideas is limited and often unclear. For instance, the argument regarding European countries and taxes is tangential and lacks a clear connection to the prompt's focus on cultural exchange and awareness. The conclusion is repetitive and does not clearly state a final position on whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. The ideas are presented in a fragmented manner, making it difficult for the reader to follow the logic. To improve, you should focus on developing two or three clear points with specific, relevant examples rather than listing loosely connected observations.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure of these paragraphs is weak. There is a lack of logical progression between sentences, and the use of cohesive devices is very limited and often mechanical (e.g., 'For example', 'In conclusion'). Some sentences are disjointed, such as the transition between the discussion of media and the mention of Muslim countries. Referencing is often unclear, making it hard to track the subject matter. To improve, focus on using transition words to link your ideas more effectively and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that supports your overall argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits the ability to convey complex ideas. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'PSSIBILE', 'CHRIMISTAS', 'COLOUSION', and 'DONOT'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to discuss the topic with any precision. You often rely on simple, high-frequency words, and the misuse of terms like 'harmed' (likely meaning 'alarmed' or 'concerned') significantly impacts clarity. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to globalization, culture, and technology, and pay closer attention to spelling and word formation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and punctuation. For example, 'The people who live in European country who worked some hours' is grammatically incorrect and confusing. Many sentences are run-on or fragmented, and the use of capital letters for entire paragraphs is inappropriate. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct verb tenses and subject-verb agreement, before attempting more complex structures.
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