Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.
Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Travelling other countries becoming available in many places spread of mass media writer like news, social media, all complete globally understand the another country lifestyles, cultures and people know what happening in other countries i believe advantages is more significant.
Firstly we talk about advantages of media will help people understand better culture in globally help those went to another countries they will help furthermore help how much job opportunities in outside is there and also what is happening globally like studies is good or not went to masters they will help students more international opportunities help people work visas and also visa approvals help persons For instance,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 108 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. While the student attempts to state a position ('advantages is more significant'), the ideas are severely underdeveloped and lack the necessary depth, evidence, and examples required for an academic essay. The response reads more like a collection of fragmented thoughts rather than a structured argument. To improve, the student must expand on their points with specific examples and ensure the essay is of sufficient length to allow for a full development of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a clear logical progression. There is no introduction or conclusion, and the body paragraph is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is minimal and often misused, such as the abrupt transition 'For instance,' which is followed by no actual example. The lack of paragraphing and the fragmented nature of the sentences make the text difficult to follow. To improve, the student should focus on using clear topic sentences, linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in contrast'), and ensuring that each paragraph develops a single, coherent idea.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic terms like 'help', 'people', and 'things', which restricts the ability to express complex ideas. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'understand the another country lifestyles' and 'help those went to another countries'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey precise meaning or demonstrate an awareness of academic style. To improve, the student should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to globalization, cultural exchange, and international travel, and practice using these words in full, grammatically correct sentences.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple, poorly constructed sentences. There are frequent errors in basic grammar, including subject-verb agreement ('advantages is'), missing articles, and incorrect verb tenses ('those went to another countries'). Punctuation is also problematic, with run-on sentences and a lack of proper sentence boundaries. The frequency of these errors often impedes communication, making it difficult for the reader to grasp the intended meaning. The student needs to focus on mastering basic sentence structures, including the correct use of articles, prepositions, and verb forms before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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