Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.
Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
the easy travel for the international travellers and the mass media make it more easy to know how other people are living in their country and how they survive in daily life.
to begin with, in this modern era every single person is using the social media from baby to old age people they are uploading every thing when and where they are travelling and mass media are always ready cover every situation every time its a good thing to increase the general knowledge we should know about the own nation as well as others. for example, I am daily watching in news and on the social media about the other countries rules and regulations or how there people are living and after some time I make plan to study ab road than its beneficial for me to survive in the new country we should know the basic things like, transportation system, groceries, residential areas, working areas, tourist areas and etc. perhaps its became a helpful thing
to commence with, the mass media has some bad imapcts on the new generation according to the survey of times of India last moth they declared in their newspaper some local media channels are running some fake and fraud newsies for the higher TRP so its requested to the higher authorities to investigate on them and cease the local fraud channels. if they give wrong information about the any other country but in actual it country was good economy or good in nature people who live there so it can be make wrong information in my mind set.
to conclude the information about some nations by the mass media its a beneficial for the all the nations
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by discussing both advantages and disadvantages. However, the development of ideas is inconsistent. While you mention the benefits of general knowledge and preparation for travel, the disadvantages section focuses heavily on 'fake news' and media regulation, which is only tangentially related to the core topic of international awareness. The position is clear, but the arguments lack depth and specific examples are somewhat anecdotal. To improve, ensure that your points directly address the impact of knowing how others live, rather than shifting the focus to media ethics or government policy.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is often disrupted by awkward transitions and repetitive phrasing. For instance, the use of 'to begin with' and 'to commence with' is confusing, as both phrases serve the same purpose. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often mechanical or misused, such as the abrupt transition 'than its beneficial' in the first body paragraph. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of your argument. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would enhance the overall structure.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'good thing', 'helpful thing', and 'bad impacts'. There are also several instances of word-choice errors and non-standard collocations, such as 'fake and fraud newsies' and 'make wrong information in my mind set'. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of precision and the presence of spelling errors (e.g., 'ab road' for 'abroad', 'imapcts') restrict the score. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more academic vocabulary and precise collocations to express your ideas more effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or fragmented, such as 'for example, I am daily watching in news... and after some time I make plan to study ab road than its beneficial'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and periods that make the text difficult to parse. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often inaccurate. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would significantly improve the clarity and accuracy of your writing.
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