Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.
Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In this societal landscape, the ease of international travel and stretching of various mass media has rose a sense of curiosity and desire of people to know how other people around the world are leaving. However this topic is contentious or debatable from my vantage point I find more favourable to the merits this. This paragraph will illustrate the advantage and I will also support the positive perspective of this.
Firstly, the ease of travel in the 21st century is because of the the global development and trade among different countries that lifted up sanctions of visa for trading countries so people from all around the world can travel to their proximity and enjoy their culture. Alongside the advancement if mass media specially the mobile has given access to people to capture their interactive moments and share with the other public and relatives around the world with the means of several platforms.
on other hand, Introduction of video vlogging has made people more intrusive to record their travel experience and share them via some special platform like YouTube and Instagram through which they can even earn by gaining more subscription from around the world has raised more curiosity to see how people across the globe are living their life specially the people in western world .
In Conclusion, the lifted sanction and advancement in technology has made modern era people more crazy to view what's going around the world and to see what is the actual image of the world is.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt but lacks depth. While you state your position that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, the development of ideas is superficial. You mention travel and media as factors but fail to provide a balanced discussion or specific examples of the 'advantages' and 'disadvantages' as requested. The essay reads more like a description of current trends rather than an argumentative response. To improve, you must clearly outline both sides of the argument and provide concrete evidence or logical reasoning to support your stance. The conclusion is also quite brief and does not effectively summarize the main points discussed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. Transitions between ideas are often missing or mechanical, such as the abrupt start of the third paragraph with 'on other hand'. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate, which makes the flow of the argument feel disjointed. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the relationship between the sentences within paragraphs could be strengthened by using a wider variety of linking words to show contrast or addition. Improving the use of signposting language will help the reader follow your argument more effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for basic communication but lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'stretching of various mass media', 'lifted up sanctions of visa', and 'more crazy to view'. These errors occasionally impede the clarity of your message. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more academic vocabulary and ensuring that words are used in their correct context. Avoid informal phrasing like 'more crazy' and aim for more sophisticated alternatives that convey your meaning with greater precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that affect readability. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('has rose', 'media has given'), incorrect verb forms ('are leaving' instead of 'living'), and missing articles. Sentence structures are relatively simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often contain errors in punctuation or syntax. For example, the sentence 'However this topic is contentious or debatable from my vantage point I find more favourable to the merits this' is structurally confused. You need to focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like tense consistency and article usage.
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