Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.
Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
How quite interesting it will be if I don't have that much in pocket to travel the world but still I want to explore the culture and others way of living and I can do this still having zero money with the help of media and social platforms. So yes I can say this the mass media play a vital role to connect us with each other. We can share our daily routine, life culture with our surrounding neighbourhood countries or more far. Yes there are some disadvantages of it but I think the advantages can outperform them.
How ? Let me explain about it though explain:
The mass media is responsible for giving us current statistics of our global village what happening in it and what's going in it. The world became a global village so everyone has been connected with each other we can overcome a disaster or big problem before time because of the mass media we can enjoy participate in the different Nations activities because of the social connection.
Think you are living in America and your family is in Asia how you will know their daily life? You can know though the help of social apps you can know what they are doing right now.
You can get all the important news on time if there is any sudden issues which you need to fix you can fix it with the help of mass media even setting thousand miles away from home.
You can broadcast the entire world even you sit in a room on the one end of earth.
So yes I can say from all these example the advantages of this development out weight the disadvantages of mass media
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by acknowledging both the advantages and disadvantages of international travel and mass media. However, the development is quite superficial. While you state that advantages 'outperform' disadvantages, you do not clearly articulate what those disadvantages are, which is a requirement for a balanced discussion. The ideas are presented in a somewhat informal, conversational tone rather than an academic one. To improve, ensure you provide concrete examples for both sides of the argument and maintain a formal structure throughout the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a clear structure. The introduction is informal and lacks a thesis statement, and the body paragraphs are not clearly demarcated. The use of cohesive devices is limited and often repetitive (e.g., 'because of', 'with the help of'). The transition between ideas is often abrupt, such as the sudden shift to the rhetorical question 'How ? Let me explain about it though explain:'. Improving the use of linking words like 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in contrast' would help create a more logical flow between your arguments.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple phrases like 'daily routine', 'big problem', and 'important news'. There is an attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'global village' and 'statistics', but the overall range is limited. Some word choices are imprecise or unnatural, such as 'outperform' in the context of comparing advantages and disadvantages, where 'outweigh' would be more appropriate. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary and collocations related to technology and globalization.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with sentence structure, such as run-on sentences and fragments (e.g., 'How quite interesting it will be if I don't have that much in pocket...'). Subject-verb agreement and article usage are inconsistent. For example, 'the mass media play a vital role' should be 'plays'. The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. To improve, focus on mastering complex sentence structures and proofreading for basic errors in tense and punctuation.
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