Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-08-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.
Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In this contemporary era to know various things on what people are doing and how individuals live that made easy to get. With the help of this people can easily get knowledge about cultural and tradition of the country. Moreover,it also help economical growth of the country. I think that advantages outweigh disadvantages. this essay will articulated more in the following paragraphs.
On the one hand , talking about the advantages the first and fore most reason is it can help to know the cultural and tradition of any country with the help of mass media because individuals like to know new new various things about countries as a result the get to know about what types of food , festivals ,clothes and how they are living. Moreover, it is also helpful for people and made easy if any people want to go their than they can easily get the knowledge with the help of media . Furthermore, it is also help for any countries for economy development because if the any country share there cultural ,traditions, food ,places and lifestyle they can easily attract individuals to come there and explore their country so that they can get employments to the local individuals and as well as peers also get the income to earn from the tourism.
However, it is advantage for country to get economic growth but the local peoples and environment of that area will highly populated and polluted due to this people has to suffer lot due to this and they also have to suffer from some diseases which can harm their health also. As a result it is helpful for earning income but harmful for health.
To conclude, international travel and mass media both are helpful for people to get knowledge and countries get economic development as well as to earn income for local tribes. Although it is advantage for individuals but they have to suffer from pollution and over crowded place and it also harmful to environment.n So, this have both merits and demerits both.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The essay addresses the prompt by discussing the advantages and disadvantages of international travel and mass media. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. While you mention cultural exchange and economic growth, the arguments lack depth and specific examples. The disadvantage section is quite brief and focuses primarily on pollution and health, which is a valid point but could have been expanded with more nuance. Your position is clear from the introduction, but the overall response would benefit from more detailed supporting evidence to move beyond a general level of discussion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'moreover' and 'with the help of'. There are also issues with referencing; for instance, the transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt. Some sentences are poorly connected, making the flow feel disjointed at times. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the logical progression of your arguments.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is quite limited and repetitive. You rely on basic phrasing such as 'new new various things' and 'made easy'. There are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'this essay will articulated' (should be 'will be articulated') and 'peers also get the income' (where 'peers' is used incorrectly). To achieve a higher band score, you need to demonstrate a wider range of vocabulary and use it more precisely, avoiding repetitive structures and basic errors in word formation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'it also help'), sentence fragments, and incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'this essay will articulated'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around commas. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often inaccurate, leading to confusion. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb forms, and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect prepositions before attempting more complex grammatical forms.
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