Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.

Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The ease of international travel and help of media it possible for individuals to know that how other people lives in different countries.

Initially, the significant advantage of international travel and media is that we can finally know that how other countries peoples lives lifes. We can know about their native language and their traditional culture and how they became successful in life. However another sharp benefit is that we can know about the rules in country and how people following it. The success of a country is also depends on their youth. The media provides us all these advantages that we don’t need to travel abroad to learn about it we just have to set on our house and open media on mobile phone or television. Media is also a huge source to learn about the fashion which is trending on other countries. People can see live conditions on other countries as now days IRAN vs USA is rissing rapidly so visiting it now can be harmful for tourists we getting all these information from internet through media.

Overall, I slightly believe that it have some disadvantages like it can leak country privacy. For instance North Korea is very strict country they don’t want anyone to record there people’s or make videos about their traditions. Moreover it also can leak their researches and recent projects.

In conclusion the media and international travel providers facility to learn new things from foreign nationals but it also danger for some countries where media is strictly restricted or banned. The visitors should avoid these nations as it can be dangerous for them.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing the advantages and disadvantages of global connectivity. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments regarding 'country privacy' and 'research leaks' are somewhat tangential to the core prompt about understanding other cultures. The position is not consistently clear, as the essay shifts between describing benefits and warning about risks without a strong, cohesive argument. To improve, you should focus on developing your main points with more specific examples and ensure your position is clearly stated in the introduction and maintained throughout the essay.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. Transitions between ideas are often abrupt or missing, such as the jump from 'fashion' to 'IRAN vs USA' within the same paragraph. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical way (e.g., 'Initially', 'However', 'Moreover'), but they do not always connect ideas effectively. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of your argument. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'how other countries peoples lives lifes' and 'set on our house'. You rely on basic vocabulary, which restricts your ability to express complex ideas precisely. To reach a higher band, you need to expand your range of vocabulary and focus on using words in their correct context. Avoid using informal phrasing and try to incorporate more academic collocations to improve the sophistication of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('The success of a country is also depends'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, which hinders readability. While there is an attempt at complex sentences, they are often inaccurate. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like pluralization and verb tense consistency. Reducing the number of errors will help ensure that your meaning is communicated clearly to the reader.

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