Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.
Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The comfort of international affairs go and distribute of several form of deal media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries. Although this program has few advantages of heightened global awareness.
On the other hand, the crisis ague the increase d exposure the foreign lifestyle via media and other social platforms. When the younger generation although the consultancy agreements have a so much role at that time.
While the other point of view their are many disadvantages the people that are live in other countries the lifestyle difference, language, and other difficulties.
In my conclusion their are many difficulties at that time The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 153 words. Consequently, the development of ideas is severely limited. The essay does not clearly state a position on whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, and the arguments presented are fragmented and lack supporting evidence or examples. The conclusion merely repeats the prompt rather than synthesizing the points discussed. Due to the significant under-length and the lack of a coherent argument, the response does not adequately address the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks logical progression. While there are paragraph breaks, the ideas within them are disconnected and often nonsensical, such as the mention of 'consultancy agreements' which is irrelevant to the topic. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences or ideas, making the text difficult to follow. The referencing is unclear, and the overall structure is disjointed, preventing the development of a coherent argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and often misused, which frequently impedes communication. Phrases like 'comfort of international affairs go' and 'distribute of several form of deal media' are grammatically and lexically incorrect, making the intended meaning obscure. There is no evidence of a range of vocabulary appropriate for an academic task, and the repetition of the prompt in the conclusion indicates a lack of lexical control.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that distort meaning. There are significant issues with sentence structure, such as 'the crisis ague the increase d exposure the foreign lifestyle', which is ungrammatical. Subject-verb agreement is consistently poor, and there is a lack of complex sentence structures. Punctuation is also inconsistent. The high frequency of errors makes the text very difficult to read and understand.
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