Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Complete Catalyst · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The ease of international travel and the spread of various kinds of mass media all over the world have made it more possible than ever for people to know how other people live in other countries.
Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Nowdays, international travel has become much easier and mass media has spread rapidly around the world. As a result, people can learn more about how other people loive in other countries. In my opinion, advantage of this development outweigh the disadvantage.
On the one hand, international travel help people learn more about and help people to diffrent language and diffrent culture. International travel very useful for people lifestyle, daily routine ansd other things. Moreover, international travel provide the best opportuinity visit in the other countries. People more about learn the duffrent food, festivals, tradition to other countries. Another benefits mass media, social media and internet provide the all information about the other countries. This can increase people knowledge and more open minded. However, other countries how to provide the best edcation, job and carrior oportunities.
On the other hand, the major disadvantage the people concern is that exposure to foreign lifestyle may cause people to ignore their own tradition. Young people in particular may copy trends from other countries bacause they see them frequently on social media. In addition, mass media always not provide the correct information. Finally the social media, mass media most of the time all news wrong and made in ai. People are nowdays in modren and ignore their own culture.
In conclusion, although international travel and mass media some time have a negtive impact. I believe their advantage are greater. They help people understand diffrent cultures, broaden their knowledg and skills create valuable educational and proffesion opportunities.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt and maintains a clear position throughout. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention benefits like cultural exchange and educational opportunities, the points are often repetitive or lack specific supporting evidence. For example, the paragraph on advantages lists several ideas (food, festivals, education) but does not elaborate on how these specifically impact society. Similarly, the disadvantages are mentioned but remain somewhat superficial. To improve, focus on developing one or two key arguments per paragraph with concrete examples rather than listing multiple points briefly. The response meets the minimum length requirement, but the depth of analysis needs to be increased to reach a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand', 'On the other hand', and 'In conclusion' to signal the progression of your argument. However, the internal cohesion within paragraphs is sometimes weak. Sentences often feel like a list of points rather than a flowing argument. For instance, in the second paragraph, the transition between discussing travel and mass media is abrupt. Additionally, some referencing is unclear, such as the sentence 'Another benefits mass media', which lacks a proper grammatical link to the previous thought. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each sentence logically follows the last will enhance the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for a higher band. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'Nowdays', 'loive', 'diffrent', 'ansd', 'duffrent', 'carrior', and 'proffesion'. These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle with collocations; for example, 'provide the all information' is unnatural. To improve, you should focus on learning the correct spelling of common words and expanding your range of topic-specific vocabulary. Using more precise synonyms and ensuring accurate word formation will help you demonstrate a better command of the language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'international travel help people'), missing articles (e.g., 'provide the best opportuinity visit in the other countries'), and incorrect word order. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence construction, ensuring verbs agree with subjects, and proofreading for basic grammatical slips will significantly improve your score.
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